[week 4]Maddawg_MKN (2-0) vs Ill-Mental (2-1)
 

Topic: Riot for Romance

due date: saturday
judging ends: monday

make it dope...................

hey yo...............checkin in..............dont know about tha topic, but throw sumthin nice up, good luck ill-mental,

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Done, peace, 1

i like th topic... VERY original.... i will have fun with this opne

Topic: Riot for Romance

Larry Jackson
Angel

Larry has never really succeeded in life. He has always been dealt horrible hands. His dad passed away when he was 5 and his mom has been addicted to cocaine for most of his lyfe. He now finds himself impoverished and living off of food stamps with his mom, who can hardly support herself. While “madness” tries to victimize Larry, only one persistent thought maintains his sanity.

Larry (Thinking):
There are only a few things in lyfe that have Riveted and Moved Me/
Feel lyke I’m Livin In a Movie, where time stands still, in tha Deliverance of her Beauty/
Tha decision…I Quiva In it Truly, no response…I’m Beginnin ta beCome UnRuly/
I’m Done Cruising, screw “ground”…I need ta stay on “Solid Feet”/
Time ta Act…Probably, only if she would throw me a glance…Acknowledge Me/
“Dreams” Follow Sleep, “rememba Larry…don’t Scream, Swallow…Breath/”

For Angel…its Summer Break, Larry sees her…than develops a Sudden Shake/
He approaches her slowly…lyke he has Sumthin ta Say/

Larry (Thinking):
Why would she want me? My life is Battered…Abused/
It coincides with broken mirrors…Shattered and Used/
Laugin at Truth, insanity is upon me…Madness is Due/
Tactics Unglued…love without response, could Happen ta You/
Habits Conclude, my adoration…along with Happiness, I Rapidly Lose/
Love is blind, so “Captions” are Used/

He begins Mutterin “Hey”, Her eyes Flutter and she Shutters Away/
He quickly lowers his head and walks by, “maybe Anotha Day”/

Larry (Thinking):
Snap out of it and get back down ta Reality/
Why do ya always have to flounder, React so Cowardly/
“I’m completely losin my mind”…not yet, it will be Back in an Hour “G”/
My heart if enveloped in hate, which quickly Devours Me/
Temptation arrives in many forms, “Couldn’t it be Powder-Free”/
Her impact is Tower…Ing, I watch her “Glorious Steps”…Graceful Movement/
Her smile…“Notorious Crest”, Laced with Music/
“I Hate tha Way she can Do This”, I’m not “speaking” clearing, my AK is Fluent/


Concealed by Larry’s hoodie, an arsenal is Tucked in his Pants/
Lust in his Rants, Angel remains close,…vision blurred…Dust, in his Glance/

Larry (Thinking):
Rapid Regression, life spirals downward…Massive Depression/
I Ask Love a Question, “Why so much hurt, atleast Pass A Suggestion”
You cause Backwards Reflections; my mind has a Grasp on Infection/
Prematurely signin and inscribing my Last will and Testament/
My heart is bleeding…Passionately asking for Protection/

Larry Quits…He is tired of Bearing Hits…Its Scary Ish/
His hoodie Rarely Flips, to expose a knife…which Tears his Wrists/
Strike 3 in lyfe…he Barely Missed, now’s he’s left in Angel’s Dust/
Covered with Abrasions…Cuts, one too many “Hits”, now his Brain is Mush/
Tha Game is Tough, too bad Larry couldn’t Remain in Touch/

News Report:
In otha news taday, Larry Jackson was found dead on MenFightthaDream Street/
Tha brain is what PhenCycLiDine (PCP) Eats/ Apparently it was an Overdose/
Physicians and examiners, said his chances of living were So Remote/
Acquaintances say every “Trip” Larry took…resulted in Comatose/
Coincidentally, he was Known as “Ghost”…even his alias was Ohh, So “Close”/
“Angel Dust” Owned his “Roast”, including hopes…Larry Died with No Chance/
To tha drug…Larry Supplied his Own Hands, in his “mindless” Riot for Romance/

is the due date 12pm est? or pst? cause im on pst and its only 9

its eastern, but drop soon, peace, good luck, 1

really disapointing ill didnt show for this...

anyway..
madawg...really good verse man
kept me interested all the way thru
imagery wordplay and the flow were all good and helped make this a dope bit of writing
it was well thought out and had a level of complexity concealed under what appeared to be a simple concept..at least i thought it did
best ive seen from yu...pretty dope kid only dissapointing bit was the end para..didnt work very well imo

'Rapid Regression, life spirals downward…Massive Depression/
I Ask Love a Question, “Why so much hurt, atleast Pass A Suggestion
^one of your stand out lines

props

nyce lookin fgee, its was kinda rushed.....i'm just glad i pulled it through, i'm mad dissapointed ill didnt show...you could atleast dropped sumthin, stay real, peace, 1

lyftin it for feed back, even though this kid didnt show, stay real, peace, 1

This Was Dope.. But Was The Angel S'pose
To Talk In Red? Cuz I Didn't See Any

Hmm.. Ne Ways.. Dope Piece Bro

lol, yeah......but i figured deadly drugs lyke PCP do not talk, lol, stay real, peace, 1

everyone knows that tha alias for PCP is Angel Dust right?, lol, i hope so....or you would not undastand my verse, peace,1

sorry i didnt show for this... last night i kinda had a family emergency and had to drive to sacramento... my nephew got put in the hospital... you had a dope verse mkn... i would have liekd to write ohn this topic... im gonna ask the mods not to ban me for this no-show... but if you do i understand, the rules are the rules

yeah man, its straight, atleast you had a reasonable excuse, no prob....i'm sure ya would have came hard, no hard feelins.........but dont do this ish again, lol, stay real, peace, 1

yeah i wont ban him because his nephew's illness...alright very nice piece Maddawg you seem to be a story teller...you do a nice job at it...

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