[Week4] Ray Zor (0-1) vs Pot1ent (0-1)
 

Whoever Loses This Match Is Out Of The league

Topic: a last good-bye



due date: saturday
judging end's: monday

NOt a Casket match, we will not have those.

alright yeah wasn't sure...

-1-

I'll drop on saturday. .Ma bad for not dropping last time. .

A Last Goodbye

The obscure tears before neared towards joy
Now when injured here its deplored to destroy
Love was restored by envoys to sew the tears
Alone in despair cuz they couldn't hone repairs
Both roam on air unprepared for their break up
Futures like 'get me outta here' wit no make up
Elates shut when they slowly stagger towards..
Hagard rewards & love now daggers & soars
Stabbing in the night, Having recite their fright
Of the strike on their lifes thats much opposed
The gut revoloved then dissolved into a mould
& shows their twisted mixed feelings they had
They couldn't even show they were feeling sad
Emotions cause commotion like the twin towers
These two don't cower!! they stand proud & fall
Like great magicans they didnt let reality enthral
Which was calamity,fueled by loads of crude love
They loave to use up, but can't!! Like fossil fuels
Do anythin possible to renewal the love mauled

this was pretty good...
rhyme scheme was good...
nice emotion...
Probably one of the better pieces I've read on here...

I'd say... 5.5 out of 10... honestly...
good job...

blah, Ive seen better from you

I wasnt feeling the subject, but you put nice emotion into it

but the flow and rhyme scheme was on point

props

Vote - Pot1ent, lol