Rules of the Game
 

this is my life (LM)
fictional piece (token)
setting goals (deva)

HOOK:
These are the rules of the game
plotted everything but the fame
still the same but now we reign
(pause)
so, whacha gonna do when they come for you?
suits of blue and your homeboy too

picture perfect, fled the scene to sceme
something must of went wrong i heard a ring
homeboy spilled his guts to a fiend now we aint in the mood to sing
some fling made him soft, now we runnin from the cops
sirens approach, and we hide our roachs and pop all our pills
fill our toilets with sacks using precise skill
till only thing i could think of was to kill
still, i should of learned from my mistakes
learn from the fakes, take out the shake
rake all the problems up and murder the bastard
he better run faster cause hes in for a disaster
fun only lasts if your fast to take out the informant
your friend dies, but atleast the problem stays dorment

HOOK:
These are the rules of the game
plotted everything but the fame
still the same but now we reign

they trailin me but they failin to see a thing
I keep it discrete, so they have no reason for a sting
I am the king of my castle, the goat spot be my market place
grace us with a trace, you will surely catch a blast to the face
lace up these rhymes and murder any ace you hold
you fold, when you should of been listening to what i have told
behold, the blueprints of money makin
dont just try to hear, try to listen
you too busy fishin, thats why your cash be missin
first off, fuck your friends they up to no good
food for thought, I wish i would of killed some when i could
Also, never trust a bitch
they are always the first to snitch
and i doubt they would ever shed a tear if you were in a ditch
so stay clear of any trick ass beer drinking whores
cause the only thing they good for getting on all fours
now form an army of soldiers, as you are now the don
so pawn all your junk and get enough guns to take on king kong
your well on your way to play this game like ping pong
but you need rules, for these are tools to control some fools
and are also an inexpensive way of preventing blood pools
now, never show respect to those who dont do the same
its a shame but they have only thought of themselves since they came
and tame your enemies, get all your friendlys and make an example
trample a corner and if they come you better be ample
sample what i have taught and I pray to god none of us get caught
plot out everything and especially what product is bought

HOOK:
These are the rules of the game
plotted everything but the fame
still the same but now we reign
(pause 4 sec)
so whacha gonna do?

See that wsnt hard = )


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the secind portion was good. nice vocab nice beat. easy to follow. i liked they trailin me but they failin to see a thing
I keep it discrete, so they have no reason for a sting
I am the king of my castle, the goat spot be my market place
grace us with a trace, you will surely catch a blast to the face
it sounded professional. what sucked was the first verse. it was too simple and it just plain sucked. try to make it longer. elevate

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Nice work..keep up the flow..and keep it coming..aight peace

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I thought the level of vocab was simple.. but it was fresh.. Holla! Peace

yeah this was alright...it was a good read...the flow was good i thought, it was off a bit but nothing big.....your vocab was alright could be up'd a little though but nothing major....you structured this well i thought too...I liked the hook it was pretty good...overall i thought this was a good piece, worth the read...keep at it...and keep dropping.

Not bad, good read... but lacked imagination, once in a while its goos to read sumting that's jus straight forword, but maybe ya'll should have thought a bit more bout the reader... involve em', give em' sumting to relate to... it was ok... overall- 6/10