the now
 

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/5/ausaungyumusic.htm

the concept for this song is about as intricate as the lyrics

but i'm describing what i see(a woman on the pipe) or feel(while i'm walking) and in the verses with distortion i'm just sharing my thoughts

the lyrics ar eon the page







http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=90089
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=88793

1st off...

just say >no< to distortion..it sounds terrible...you can use sumthin different to be 'thought'..

turn up your vocals...

the delivery needs a bit more practice...

the beat is str8...

coud be a nice track...come back and re-do it some time in the future...

keep spittin...

:sidenote:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=90217

^^peep game...

ok first off love this beat.. rjd2 is a fucking mastermind..ok.. flow is cool.. slips a couple little times.. nothing bad.. delivery does need some work.. you need more emotion behind this.. however it does get better as you get into it..lyrics im feeling.. the distortion could be better replaced by something else.. i know some tricks.. my aim is bjhnny4 ..i might be able to help you there..the kind of spoken word you do when the beat drops out is nice.. not done very ofen.. and i liked the fade out echo.. overall good drop with a few minor flaws to fix up.. and i liked the question you dropped in your reply.. good one...it put some ideas in my head..
peace