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Open Eyes Wide Shut( feat. Yaz & Shay-d)
hold up yall...
just listin... have u ever wonderd what people are thinkin... it's like people see what they wanna see... and belive what they want to... shit needs to wrok out ya know... it's like... [Verse 1] <~( Yaz )~>(\1/)<~( The Forsaken One )~> your eyes are wide shut, like they rolled up in-your-skull// you clearly see the world, colourless, black and dull// shit never goes rite so you pass down the torch// to sum other bitch who think he bout to florish// FUCK NO!!! wene im up il kill any living being// get them to realize their clearly not-seeing// shit fucked up and you protestin your the best// man they should lock u under citizin arrest// your not seein the truth to-this, clearly im bein to-ruthless// you best do-this, listen to my shit and think of-it// mabey your skillz improve and you'll level wit-it// make a hit, come out on top then drop with-it// then you'll be back to callin out my name and-shit// your whole army could stand up to us three// shay-d, me and the MC-UsKi// number one MC killers, can't get no realer// next to us bitch your no opeiler// You can't see the truth... evan if it fucks you up// You can't see shit with open eyes wide shut// [Chorus] EYES - INTO A PLACE THAT I TAKE YOU WIDE - IT SEEMS NO BODY CAN MISTAKE YOU SHUT - I GUESS THIS IS THE TRUTH OPEN EYES WIDE SHUT, BUT THEY NEVA KNEW YOU [Verse 2] {/]~{ Mc-UsKi }~[\} people see what they wanna belive... but do they realy know what goes on... it's like... our eyes wide open but ide open but u takein in-nothin// u neva saw the outcome, den u shouldn't have been-frontin// your blind to the fact that i kill your whole team// their no way u could believe the way they'll scream// thats the problem with som people today// all they do is see wat they say// with ur eyes wide shut dawg u see wat u wanna see// be wat u wanna be// y were u saying we was tight// then the next day u snagged mi bitch and we had a fight// man we both kno i can box//*ahah* and we all kno u went out with that girl so u could cover up u like cox//*hahah* saying i should comit suicide// me thinken should i live or die DAMN i can deside// with ur eyes wide shut u see nothing what its surposed to look like// man just give me a motha fuken mic// so I can Rip u up 1 by 1// we knew each otha since the 1st grade// then our frendship started to fade// u got positive when u were drug tested// Man I don’t touch drugs but u did now u arrested// with ur eyes wide shut u only see me// but if u looked properly// u might actually see 4 once// [Chorus]x2 EYES - INTO A PLACE THAT I TAKE YOU WIDE - IT SEEMS NO BODY CAN MISTAKE YOU SHUT - I GUESS THIS IS THE TRUTH OPEN EYES WIDE SHUT, BUT THEY NEVA KNEW YOU [Verse 3] ][-[]-][_-=Shayd=-_][-[]-][ uski will rip u 1 by 1 but i'll rip u guys 2 by 2// keep ur eyes open or u wont know what is gonna hit u// close ur eyes... and u wont make it through// now look at ur eyes wide shut ... now there openin// see whatchu wanna see.. but this is the closin// beleive whatchu wanna beleive... but this is what im sayin// u closed ur eyes... now look at u despertly prayin// u should of listened...now im gettin sick of ur complainin// next time look around and see whats happenin... or ur life turns to shit// my life is already shit , now thats what is forcin me to spit// don't act like me or it'll lead u to hell// ive closed my eyes... now i cant see to well// keep ur eyes open... or u'll end up hurt// close them... and u get permantly buried under the dirt// open ur eyes once and for all// cause ur not ready to take a big fall// close ur eyes and u wont make it... u wont have a chance AT ALL// hahahah yo we did this shit cause we where bored… but I hope u get our fuken message bitch….. |
yall we want some feed bak on this
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that shit is tight just because im in it....
nah im just playin lol..... ya yall tell us what u think about it:) |
haha im the only one dat swore... u pussys// i realy think im addicted to swearin lol
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true mcs dun need to swear :p |
Com on we want som feed bak yall
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the verses are too damn long for 1.. & for 2 the flows rather off.. try to import multies in ur verses to try & create a bit of a rhyme scheme.. like..
bitch in a yard. trick from afar. dick with a car. sick of the bars. put shit like that within ur verses & at the end of each line to have shit flow better.. for example.. this rap shit makes me wanna clap shit. i've mapped it & made it thru the wrath bitch. but on to the collab.. to me Yaz had the best verse as far as content goes, cause none of yall had a great flow, but yaz had lines that made a nigga think about some shit, like his opener.. overall i give this collab a 6 out of 10 for originality & metaphors.. |
aiight thanx for tha feed bak ne more???????????
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eh yo uski u purpisly bolded those words.... all together the say....
~~~~~~~~~~~~FUCK NO....DAMN....AT ALL~~~~~~~~~~~~~ shit talkin bout hidein msgs. iight yo nemore feedback. keep it crackin. Peace(\1/) |
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any feed back?????
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yo any feedback?????
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yaz
your not seein the truth to-this, clearly im bein to-ruthless// too ruthless? dont get it sorry. man they should lock u under citizin arrest// citizens arrest. Overall- Work somemore and structure and the opieler rhyme didnt flow well with rest of vocab McUski your blind to the fact that i kill your whole team// their no way u could believe the way they'll scream// ^^saying team is gayish. not e-gangster ;) and u say that u kill your team but say next line the way they'll scream like u havent killed them with ur eyes wide shut dawg u see wat u wanna see// ur guy above u said that shit already. man just give me a motha fuken mic// so I can Rip u up 1 by 1// ^^taking to one dude but u address many. u might actually see 4 once// dont rhyme Overall- Speak what u know. Read some RB's Legends threads and learn some shit ..... Shay-d beleive whatchu wanna beleive... but this is what im sayin// ^what are u saying? i dont get the story line pick a topic uski will rip u 1 by 1 but i'll rip u guys 2 by 2// ...dissin own guy? dont work well. with topic. close them... and u get permantly buried under the dirt// didnt flow with top line. gotta lengthen top or shorten this one. open ur eyes once and for all// cause ur not ready to take a big fall// close ur eyes and u wont make it... u wont have a chance AT ALL// saying big fall is like a 2 syllable ending rhyme if the top is not dont rhyme it overall-i didnt get it. but o wells go get a sick atopic and rip it cuz ....i think u could if u worked. EYES - INTO A PLACE THAT I TAKE YOU WIDE - IT SEEMS NO BODY CAN MISTAKE YOU SHUT - I GUESS THIS IS THE TRUTH OPEN EYES WIDE SHUT, BUT THEY NEVA KNEW YOU ^^nice corus. <h4>Overall Piece- whoever was incharge of that chorus nice job and its best to tell a story to your topic or write ur life or something not just redundant shit Sorry if my comments are all on the negitive side. u got positive when u were drug tested// ^^if u worded this better u would have gotten a sick line.</h4> |
^^yo thanx for tha advice But asny otha feedbck??
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