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Eye WitNesS 11-06-03 11:51 PM

"Gimme My Box Back Bitch!"
 
im sick of the names & tired of jokes..
..mightaswell tie up this rope.
& tie up my throat, till i die of a choke.
im tired & broke, it's really no fun.
when ur pockets are linted..
..& theres no funds or a percentage.
& just when it's so done,
im still propped up locked at the finish.
w/ scratchers w/out a drop of a winning.
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.
.
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the unemployment line is a boring find..
..thats the only place where being bored is fine.
the lines like being intertwined w/ pergatory.
listening to some poor ladies hurting story..
..until ur finally turning forty, n ur still jobless.
& ur forced to stop & live life as a lil hobbit.
& everytime u see a bank u jus wanna rob it.
u think about all the withdrawls & deposits.
i pause then i stop it, then hit the rewinder.

..but to see money to me i couldn't be blinda..
..than Stevie,..but i wonder..
..WHY I CANT AFFORD TO WATCH A TV!
sick more, no friggin pot but still piss poor
wanna stand up n take action, but i sit for..
..a quick 4 dollars for a shot at the McDoors.
the poverty is always stopping me.
so i settle for salvation army shoppin spree's.
call the cops.. cause.. UPS is robbin' me.
they took the "this way up" right offa me.
& then they dont have a job to offer me..
..coughing & distraught with plea, please help
i cant go on holding my pants with a string belt.
only if u knew how we felt, this show's badder.
it's worse than 12 gallons of water & no bladder.
clothes tatter'd & this show cant get no wacker.
but still i cant win so really theres no matter.
im so battered, really broke its no stoppin ya.
cause..
despite the cost of living, its so popular.

Eye WitNesS 11-07-03 12:35 AM

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=90227
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=90236
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=89802
^my replys..

no can i get some?..

Baron God 11-07-03 03:48 AM

i replied to this piece elsewhere, nice flow, good use of internals and multi's, nice wording, all in all not a bad drop.
Quote:
the unemployment line is a boring find..
..thats the only place where being bored is fine.


Baron likes! :)

CHUC 11-07-03 04:09 AM

Nice flow, nice images. I'm feelin this one.

Baron God 11-07-03 04:20 AM

^ you gotta love the indepth responses of this kid, he's incredible...

Funn DementaLL 11-07-03 09:23 AM

imaginatve an captured my attention straight away...
good word play an use of multi's which is always welcome...
keep em' comming

Eye WitNesS 11-08-03 07:25 PM

^..

Ken Dawg 11-08-03 10:57 PM

Nice flow...i'm diggin it..later yo


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