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The pain is promised
The pain is promised //
My temper flaring to the point of blazing forest// An to be honest, this shits-sickning// My litch thinking is going down "deep" like a "ship-sinking"// i cant wait so im killing off PATIENTS like the prescriptions of doc HAROLD SHIPMAN// Fell from the sorrow imbedded in each flow// These manz cudnt fit in my shoes if dey stuffed tissue in front of each toe // Failing-to-rest, cuz each time i lay in my bed it feels like ders nails-in-my-chest// Faking my death and taking-the-blame// Falling-in-shame, Im on dis, a convict// Prevented to escape with a ball-and-a-chain// All is the same; i battle you for a rap or 2// madness~looms through the trail of ganga~fumes// When mad or brewd my stress tolls in a savage~mood// Expanded views but im still just an average~yout// The spawn born from a battered~womb, brain dead laying in scattered~tombs// fassys can safely assume through their bogus hand-shaking// But i can witness the deceitful glaze in their eyez that stands-blatent// Plans they make for moneys got dem pranged shaking So called mates, hate for cowards that hide behind fakes// your lifes a SNOWFLAKE dream, my stress imitates the pressures when BOUDARY LINES BREAK// Feeling enuff pain to scare-omens, growing blood pressure busts veins// So much strain its bare-potent, and seeing the "blues" like lost "boat men"// Shits real, no joke ting, I deal wit these sadistic opponents // As a black man i feels like a piece of SHIT in a FIELD FULL OF ROSES// Your Monotonous flows keeps my thoughts impose from exploding// The chosen one, my rhymes were wrote for the quoting // My Emotions sick, spits suppose // That my voice is apposing a threat // I feel brokin-n-vexed, my dicks choking these skets// Flow through existence and sail-to-the-left// Life is a journey I hope I aint failed-in-my-quest// I'm held-on-dis-stress walking through hell// Talk to myself, i feel the pain impaled-on-my-creaps// Feel like I've been held by the head and crucified wit a nail-in-my-chest// I'm trapped and jail-by-dis-shit it cud bring a tear-2-my-I// But in mind of timid emotions, I lack the feelings to cry// You cant see the fear in my eye, dis shit beats me inside// No peace in my mind, fuck insecurities dat eat me alive // My insecurities cuds beat and leave me to die// For my dayz 2 end I cant wait .. I cant wait // To Stop my heart rate ,dine on the food from my last plate// To the end im half way// Cus I feel like in the "HUMAN RACE" I'm coming out "LAST PLACE"// |
uppin plz!!!
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Ok...this was ok....watch the ling length, some are long and some are short, you should try to make them the same size length about so it flows good and structure looks good...had some ok multies in there...vocab was ok, up it though...overall it was ok...keep at it...and keep dropping.
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