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Dev 11-08-03 10:44 AM

'alternative' medicine
 
Many forms is the way it comes talking about medicines
Like a joint after a hard days work, one of life’s blessings
Which lessens the impression it leaves on the anatomy
Should be prescribed to me to relieve the anxiety
Another manifestation of its creation is alcohol
Its not bad at all, temporary block stop’s light like a parasol
A whole other person influenced by long legs, tits and all
Last time a recall, woke up 10x worse than before the fall
Another favourite of mine I find is Ecstasy its sublime
Generates the energy the feel of eternal life without decline
Its fine for a quick pick me up, for a few hours you’ll shine
Burning brain cells, so losing time another ‘E’ another chime
If ya wanna go the other way, drop an acid’n start to really play
Alternative world revolved on your own thoughts drifting away
Lifting reality to another plane, careful can turn you insane
But its fuckin good, so typically it must fuck wit ya brain
My favourite by far is coke a toke a snort the quick transport
Neutralise my nasal absorb, short sting then Buzzin galore
Doesn’t last long, from taken to about 30 mins then its gone
To confirm to prolong another hit timed to normalities gong
The way I do it is all in one, hash, e’s, coke, acid, alcohol collab
Ultimate hit the rush the buzz of it all in a mix up bag…………………..

Lil_Jules_uk 11-08-03 10:49 AM

i liked it, it was dope , some gd lines!!! keep them comin!!

pot1ent 11-08-03 10:50 AM

Which lessens the impression it leaves on the anatomy
Should be prescribed to me to relieve the anxiety

^That was a decent attempt at a multi but the last words don't rhyme completely. .

The flow was kept thoghout though & qute good, there could be room for improvement like everybody ie. more inner, multis etc.

But it was good along with the content was i di enjoy. .Props

Pz.

Dev 11-08-03 10:55 AM

shit, sorry i forhot th write the replies down, here they are

mostar - just clowning
point-blank - contradict this
homicide187 - struggle

NewPort 11-08-03 12:41 PM

I Deff Seen Potential Here..Yet Ya Rhyme
Was Off.. Words That Made The Depth Better
But Didn't Fit The Whole Rhyme Scheme.. Work
On FLowing Your Words Together.. Overall
Not Bad Kid

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Dev 11-08-03 04:53 PM

thnx for the feed....oh and auspicious i tried to hit your links but they dont work, it said 'no link specified', aight.......Pc

WORD~PERFECT 11-08-03 05:15 PM

you got skill that cant be questioned but i know ive seen better from you this was still a decent read

Rob D 11-08-03 08:23 PM

nice piece,
some good lines,
the flow was consistent throughout,
just try and add multis/internals but dont force them,
some nice vocab,

overall good piece,worth reading, just keep writing and elevating,


can you check out my Consider yourself lucky piece

Dev 11-10-03 07:53 PM

thanx for the feed....cana get some more thrown this way......peace dawgs


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