freestyle #1
 

when I get killed...I don't care wen i get killed/
with bullets filled...with goddamn bullets filled/
pop my head off i don't give a fuck shoot me man/
like 2pac said I rather die like a man than live like a coward, damn/
cut my heard out if you like, I will die anyway/
y'all pussys are gay you won't pop me, no way/
allready got 6 lines, I just spit cuz I'm bored/
7 lines now, when i've got 12 your heard'll stop like whitey ford's/
I know y'all niggaz don't like this rhyme and y'all hate me/
but do I care? no I don't you fake-ass D.R.E./
this freestyle looks like freeposting but it's still ten times better than yours/
me and my dawg pop your trunk away with double four four's/
like eminem my only weapon is force that's how I kill these whores/
now look at ja rule and dmx I bet suckin dick is bad for your vocal cords/
I kill all you scizo niggaz on these RB boards..

like I told...I got bored so thats why I dropped this freestyle

How is it a freestyle when its written?..lmao.

but anyways, ur missing alot of the elementz in your lyrics. You deffinetly need multis, mettaphors, wordplays, vocabs..etc. This was way too basic. but keep practicin and u'll get better

Holla One.

hmmmm....its ok

Shoulda Called this a "keystyle"..

Flow was a little weak on it, try to use more internals and learn about mutli's, cos you need this knowledge in order to improve...

You dissed alot of people here, which was rather pointless....try to get a more relative subject to you, and use that..you'll be able to write alot better....

Keep elevating dawg.

hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

aint feelin it really..its simple..n well..wierd..lol

read some tutorials about metas..multis n all tht shit

you got potential