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Ken Dawg 11-09-03 02:11 PM

Some Thoughts (Repost)
 
This is a repost..my original got removed due to me not listing my replies..which I had already and totally forgot to stick it in..grrr

3 Replies: A2Z, Proficient Styles, Eleete (Plus many more)

20th century,the industrial revolution started,u sucked my dik n then got lyrically slottered//
I came outta penititiary, brought confusion when iwas discarded,coz i smacked ur daddy n made him retarded//
ur jus some skank-i-bich,named nancy-wich who must-be-rich, n ur a slut whoz obssessd wit black-man-dick//
itz kinda-frantic,betta yet perdantic, that im battlin some non bleedin inernet LAN-chick//
I frequently-shit,on this deliquent-she-gimp, whoz overfucked n abused like wrinkly dicks//
these drag-queen,leen,wanabe,disbelief,skinny-pricks,come at me,authentically but i konck em n burn em n their 3 minit, pre writs//
this girl cant battle,my dikz wat she-rattles,she takes 3 capsules(crack),fuck this dorm-hoe//
she opens her mouth n i ejaculate,get her body regulated not n her clit stimulated n then her parents watch this porno//
how you gonna use basic shit from the matrix....like taxadermists I keep you in your place-kid//
or maybe you need a replacement,just face-it,ur heart beats like rifles made it go outta cycles, n this is g.girl is a great bich, who likez to play tricks// ...

pissed ya off right?

NewPort 11-09-03 02:32 PM

Yo I Hit Up Yours In Your First Post So
Hit These Up In Favor Of My Feedback


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Menik 11-09-03 09:02 PM

this was alright....you might want to shorten your lines a little bit though...it flowed pretty decent i thought...your vocab was pretty good as well through out it...just really work on the line length, try to make them the same size...overall it was a alright piece....keep at it...and keep dropping.

-uski- 11-09-03 10:05 PM

ya that peice was aiight but make ya line a bit shorter


Peace (v)


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