death's revenge within a mind: rotted
 

death will come quick

i have seen it
it whispered to me..............in tha winds of tha lost times

and i have listened


tha voice, cold
unnerving

pain is wat it told me
pain and destruction



and speed
on tha train-tracks called life..........................one way
never to come back

but please, oh please let it come back to me death
i will love u for that
so let it come back



my life and spirit
missing in action

how did it leave by itself
HA
it always had a mind of it's own
and it was not smart to embrace it

like i did



so let us not have it become alienated
or it will leave.................................a journy never to return

but please, oh please let it come back to me death
i will love u for that
so let it come back

Good job dude. Just like all of ur other writings. Structure and everything is great. I liked ur analysis on life. How its one way, never to come back. If only people could not live totally in the past and think about the present. Okay, gettin off the subject a lil. I think ya did a great job. Keep it up. Lookin forward to read more, so keep em comin.

Great piece man. You hit it on the head. Life is a one way train and there is no turning back. Your structure is killer and all in all it was worth the read. Keep writting. Look forward to reading more.

MM