thoughts
 

Im a brain assain passin out all your deepest passion,
to all people everywhere to some people who dont really care,
and others dont want to hear you not even for a dare,
if your thoughts are that currupt,
than i wish your head would errupt,
I want to know what your thinkin and if your mind is shrinkin,
your all messed up,
the word you know is sup,
your off i mean you even enjoyed it when the doctor said turn and cough.

What do ya think

Im not quite sure what this ones about. Is it supposed to be left to the readers imagination? But the world is messed up like this piece which i think is what you were trying to get across. Nothing really makes sense does it.
'your off i mean you even enjoyed it when the doctor said turn and cough.'

that end is what ultimately lost me. I think you should try to continue where you left off. Like write what other people are thinking and why there brains are shrinking. A lil more descriptive and this piece would be longer and more of a rap. Some fresh lines though. peace.