My rhyme
 

I just thought of it today, tell me what u think.

Now it's only fair to state, my anger and my hate
is something
you don't wanna see or try to emulate/
Cause if you do
your gonna see Satan rise from hell
and take over my body and use it as his damn protective shell/
Now you may think i'm a little crazy, insane or maybe mad
fucked up in the head
or think my childhood was fucking bad/
But that aint the truth
Now if u care to deep to look deep inside of me
you will find a fucking rapper, whose just dying to break free/
Now i've been restrained
holding myself a little bit back though
afraid of what people may think of my rhyme,
is it good or is it whack yo?
But i've elevated over the past 2 years
I've been writing alot,
thinking of getting new ideas
just waiting/dying to get shot/
Coz i wanna blow up and gain the same respect as 50
sell a million records
maybe more than Slim Shady and Biggie/
I deserve to have platinum plaques, scattered across my walls
I deserve to be the rapper who came and conquered all/
See i belong in this rap game and aint ever gonna leave,
and when i'm deceased,
you'll realise just how much the game needed me.

uppin' fo feedback

I liked it alot, it grabed my attention, you should have used more detail after; But that aint the truth" I couldn't follow the end, it was serious tho, It's very thought up; with the way your words were chosen. keep it up

yo, cheers sinfic, i'll use dat advice next time i writing a rhyme.

ne more feedback.?

Ummm, i couldn't really put this rhyming scheme,with a beat! Otha than that good word play.. Keep elevating Peace!

yo uppin fo feedback

come on feedback

yo big ups G, keep up the good work

it was ok...that's the best i can say....u wrote it today?...lil weak but alright anyway....semi-good wordplay....no flow in sight....allt that i can say....is keep workin ull get it right...someday

uppin

Now if u care to deep to look deep inside of me

the 'to deep' was a mistake miss it out.
uppin.

it flowed good, i'm audio so i know flow, your shit was kinda basic, but at other times like the satan an' protective shell part it was good tho... keep elevatin'... i suggest gettin' into audio... 1