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I'm a liar
Higher than spires
an' i aspire to be admired by the whole planet
I didn't plan it, but it still gon' happen
man, it has to
I'm past the point of goin' back through the maze
to the mainstream, mean streets
I need ta obtain strength to bring heat
Be like B.G. an' "Bling, Bling"
see me, sing sing, like tra-la-la
an' doe-ray- fuck this shit
there's no way i'm-a not call shots
wit my own bouncer at bars
for brawls over who bought the shots
my hand stacked like countin' cards
the only dollar ammount for me is LARGE
I'm like a record player
brain' spinnin' round in circles
first of all,
i'm not adverse to pop hollows
i'll pay top dollar for an' assasin
ta blast in ya home
an' have ya ass wrapped in a body bag
tha's all u need to know
no more, but for your info
i'm a psycho, life so fucked up
I got no moral conciousness anymore
i don't stop, i jus' go
explode like gun shots to ya head
i'm a soldier, understand?
There's no greater threat
or punishment then me on the attack
I don't care what type-a flack ya jacket has
it can't stop a plastic bag
from sufficatin'
an' cuttin' off ya lungs from takin' in oxygen
plus ya veins can't stop me from choppin' them
i'm off my hinge, nothin' can soften this blow
I'm rockin' the whole world wit one note


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this is really 2 verses i just stuck together... lol... .holla wit sum feedback

i thought this was pretty good, i liked the structure of it and how you used your words very interesting drop keep it up pz

werd... thx... where in ontario u from dawg.. ?

Flow was onpoint in this, structure was off all over the place, but that didnt matter cause you sustained the flow throughout, contenet was a little iffy at times, not quite coinnecting and the transition needed work, you skippped from idea to idea to quickly, without really building on the previous lines.

Just my two cents.

i'm near kitchener, what bout you?

CAN HIT THIS PERFECT BUT I UNDERSTAND THAT YOU HAVE OTHER THINGSD ON YOUR MIND BUT THIS WASNT TO MUCH JUSTICE FOR YOU IT WAS JUST GOOD

lol... sup word, sup cam... thx... i know i switched ideas alot 'cause it was 2 different rhymes put together into 1... i know it wan't the best but i ain't dropped 4 a while in open mic, so i fig'd why not drop a few verses ... lol.. 1.. respect..