Gotta Make It
 

Accepting nothing but platinum achievements
Swet dripping off me but im forcing acomplishments
Oblige my talent to a mystery mountian heIight
Steap trudge easy to slip if you dont move right
Minds set to believe I can become an artisct hero
I havent met my full potential to become a pyro
Set my dreams on fire and blaze through pads
Walk on knives to just to get what pac an big had
Un-noticed emceee cuz my name in short is R-U-L-E
I'm not a foreigner to art my minds a brush draws godly
Listen closely, for i may amaze the necaessary aquantise's
Into your ear drums vibe your brave wave acceptensises
I gotta make it to the top of the peak I will not yeild
Interact thoroughly cuz im cantagious to the mic feild

A short poem, " aquantise's" i dont think is spelt right but it's suppose tobe the word meaning people. Just so ye no..replies wud be cool pz

an brave is suppose tobe brain...i was thiking summin an wrote that sorry ye'all pz

uppen for some replies

yes aquantinces (sp?) is spelled wrong but it looks something like that. Now the piece i felt u were clawing at superiority but just as you shot you fists in the air and jumped, gravity did its dirty work and brought this piece back into the dirt, keep dropping though, good potential, 1luv.

thanks man uppen

Fuck, people are sleeping on this like it was a mattress.

Anyway, you're peice was great. It was a solid look into the veiw of a person trying to make it, and can't. Especially in regards to the fact that it seems like you're trying to make it in the music business above anything else.

A few rhymes seemed off, and more then just one word was misspelled. But it was nothing that detracted from the main purpose and vision of this peice. It was very good all the way around.

~Shalom~

Some of the flow was off because the words didnt rhyme.. but the topic of the poem was nice, i like the wording of it.. the rhyme scheme was the only thing off. Overall nice drop though. Keep 'em comin!

^^^thanks the necro...and Twizted a poem doesnt have ta rhyme but thanks for the input pz

^I KNOW they dont have to rhyme.. go check out a few of my poems. Well, most of mine rhyme.. that's just how I write. Anyway.. I just meant that it was like some of your words rhymed, and then for a few lines they didnt rhyme. It was just thrown off in places, I couldn't tell whether you meant to rhyme or whether you meant not to. Feel me? Nice drop though.

hey now i wasn't haten i just sayed...lol...but thanks for the feed

LoL I didnt think you was hatin... but.. i jus hadda explain myself betta, ya know? :p nice drop

you keep coming back...you think my raps sexy and you want me LOL just messin pz

:o you weren't supposed to know.. :p haha.

^^^^stalker lol uppen for some feed

Good drop. Flow and everything was good. Its k if u spelled a few things wrong, we all tend to do it once in a while, especially if we dun kno how to spell somethin. Newayz, topic was good and structure and whatnot were ok. You got ur point across and thats really all that matters. Overall, good job. Keep em comin. Much respect.