my conscious(short keystroke)dont sleep on it
 

what the hell are we doing
ITS NOTHING LEFT FOR US HERE
iam not ready to go.... maybe its death that i fear
MAYBE ITS LIFE YOU FEAR WITH ALL ITS UNPREDICTABLE TRANSGRESSIONS
maybe its the fact at judgement time theyll reveal our intimate confessions
BUT WERE ONE IN THE SAME.. ON THIS WE TRULY MUST AGREE
you do know that suicide grants us a trip to hell eternally
IAM AWARE OF OUR CIRCUMSTANCES..BUT OUR REALITY IS THAT OF PAIN
so why give it satisfaction and further stain it with shame
LOVE DOESNT LOVE US.......EVERYDAY OUR HEART BREAKS
thats why we trust in God to mend it.......to get better we must have faith
SO ARE U SAYING WELL BE SAFE FROM THE ABUSE THAT COMES TOMMOROW
no iam saying stopping our death will prevent further sorrow
WE MAKE SOME VALID POINTS...WE DO AGREE TO DISAGREE
well lets agree to living life within the grace of the almighty

flow was good.. but this was kinda weird.. lol. only because it was two sided like that.. i think.. and one part of it is like.. angry, and the other faithful. This was well written though and I'm glad I read it. Nice drop. Keep 'em comin :p

thanks for the words................i glad somebody wasnt sleep out there

you show much talent
and an awsome spiritual life
by far one of my most favored poems on this site
the rhymes flowed
the two sided conversation was awsome
much props

The content and implications that are laced throughout are good ones. The stream of consciousness like narrrative worked well ...

But you need to format better and proofread and edit.
Your stuff should be fixed up.... you should have pride in your work.

.peace.