13. Hi My Name Is... (2-2) vs. 14. Bribeone (2-2)
 

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Your topic: Devine Intervention

ahh... big worded topics!!!!!!!!!
lol...
this'll be a good 1...
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Check.!

I had to rush this to get it in might be a bit sloppy sorry.




Divine Intervention

He was the bully all hype, and I was the bullied all right.
I wasnt gonna take it anymore, so today we brawl we fight.
I wasnt the type, but circumstance makes u do things out of loop.
I wasn't prepared to lose I would go low, I'd really go and stoop.
sharpened pencils, rools of quarters and for knifes Id use stencils.
my crew of dweebs were there for me, all set as my defenses.
15 minutes before the bell, I was a lion ready to jump out the cell.
with the ring I rushed to the door, stepped on people and knocked down shelves.
I wasnt my self, rage filled my brain, while red covered my pain.
fuck big benny, He'll be in for a surprise too see that I came.
warm type day, kids in their swings would play, but he'll still pay.
cause to this ill put a stop........ and it goes down today
He shows up with a surprised expression but a small smirk.
I head for glory screaming for my life ready to off this jerk.
we get into it I land the first blow the second and third throw.
little did I know his buddies were stepping in for the show.
4 of em precise pumbled my head and kick me while down.
but the king and his crowd, faces turned quickly into a frown
the smallest one, with glasses and pimples had brought a gun.
crazy with fear everybody started to run "Fuck" pardon the pun.
as he was about to shoot into the crowd I yelled at him no.
till divine intervetion got me in the way...I down to the floor I go.

Mad Man: Divine Intervention

Just letting you know how to spell it

I concluded i had a decent verse...
Then I found it just not suitable...
The greatest is treated the worst...
Realize, Jesus's deat was crucial...

Bear the pain Jesus endured...
Having each side viciously gored,
Expierence perefection face death...
And your body...Coated with red,
Idol him, Do what Jesus would do...
But sin...Multiple times budges thru,
Hide it, Don't confess, Yes he Knows...
Disrepected, Criticized...How so cold,
Still, Un-imaginably He Loves us...
Burning of crosses doesn't cover thus,
Thou who decide to betray his words...
Has the chance of soaring with birds,
Possible? A love impossible to vision...
Hatred...
Missionaries face demise during missions,
The Holy Bible, The humble hymns...
The teachings, Weekly confessions...
Attending church, Prasing the Lord...
Yet, Humans don't meet the standards...
that we're meant for

As i read this among saddened faces...
Concluded it's not black n' whites...
who recieve all the racism,
Christians among the top of the death list,
Which is every anti-christ's soul's wishes...
Descriminated upon numerous places...
From the palace, Tv, and these web pages
But the main issue is Father LuEllen...
Taught me respect to every man thru sessions,
Hit, Kicked, N stabbed was his last picture,
Other than his eyes wonderin the gates of heaven,
He knew...Jesus as our Lord and Savior,
N I'm Paying my respects...Love you Father Luellen...





note...please...if ur not christian..don't hate on my verse...
for that simple reason...that would be bullshit...
look at it as a verse...just don't hate how i see things

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hmmmm...pretty nice battle....Both held nice to their topic...although i feel that thrust really had a deeper piece... i liked the thought of god showing love and remorse to people who mistreated him daily...that its divine intervention indeed...Bribeone1s piece just didnt seem like a strong backing to such a deep topic...even though there was truth to his piece he didnt capture it like thrust's

vote= thrust

come on this is bullshit...1 vote?

i think that there should be some cuts...
especially all the kids who no-showed...

Yea, This was a decent battle. I liked the topic as well, good to flow off of. Brib, you came good with it. Simple rhyme scheme, alright vocab, but I liked flowing it alot. On the other hand it is a topic battle. Thrust, I was really feeling what you did with the stories. You had it pretty deep, not very good vocab, complicated rhyme scheme, which is somthing I like. It was a very good topic battle. Good Job My Brotha's.

Vote = Thrust

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

thrust (3-2)
Bribeone1 (2-3)

thrust wins