"My Riddle" Demo
 

Im not simple, cock blocken and poppin you pimples
Spit game from the mouth, but hit with the pencil
Flow essential, shows of massive potential
Active in the game, use tactics for your dental
Im bringin hype credentials, with death and perception
Life is a lesson, or can be a depression
No second guessin, foot stepin, muscle flexin
Bringin down the world, who’s the next contestant
Of mad evil, people so feeble, a troubled sequel
Of pill poppers, alcoholics, with addicts and needles
Crime waves, peace makers, lead papers to subjects
No one behaves but seems to reject
Im spitten complex, dialect, with no higher bets
No need for vest, others are just my prior pets
Im the new game, not fake, no lies, never late
Flows hit the future, stagnate and then rotate
I don’t evaluate or wait just appreciate
That god has given the life im liven, I have a fate
No spot’s tickle, tear drops causin ripples
In the puddle of sadness, hopes down to little
Some do drums, and others play fiddles
Holler at me if you can answer my unimaginable riddles…

Tell me wut you think...

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Links to my post's:

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...3150#post913150

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...3161#post913161

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...3166#post913166

alright, lets get some replies in here...

I will see these in the morning, if anyone comes -=*LOL*=-

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-High Class a.k.a Confusion

this was a pretty good piece... some nice vocab, flowed well, consistent rhymes... nicely structured...... u had a nice topic...... only thing u lacked was multis....keep writing....

8.5/10

check out my open mic "Mind Theory" please... thanks

^ my bad, i meant to say 'Rap Magnetism'... thanks

I will do that, thanks for the reply, cmon everyone. tel me what ya think...

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-High Class a.k.a Confusion

Not bad, however I feel jus readin' it you were jus anxious to post sumtin coz you know you got text skills... next time around pace yourself, don't rush it, I liked your work though??? we would make a good collabo!!! you uppin'

Return the favor plz an vote on my battle on Frontlines
(Funn DementaLL Vs.LM) thanx, I would set up a link but lack the knowlege to do so!!!

yeah i agree this was a decent enough verse, flowed good, structured ok, with some nice vocab........but the one thing i dont like is the format...1 verse nuthin else, i prefer 2-3 verses with a hook...............but i liked it.....Pc

yea, its just a little demo verse so far LOL. thanks for the feedback, and I wouldnt mind doing a collabo. Just give me the topic, or whatever we need to do. And Im up for it. Ok, lets get some more thoughts please.

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-High Class a.k.a Confusion

it flowed good and had good wordplay. nice vocab to and overall a good read, keep up the work.

check my rhyme called 'Time Bomb'

Aight then, I will check that out homie. Thanks for the feed back so ma brotha's. Do any of you think I should creat this into a full track for my CD next year? Keep it comin, I really appreciate this .

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-High Class a.k.a Confusion

COME ON, SOME MORE FEEDBACK...

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-High Class a.k.a Confusion

with 42 views of this page there are like 4 replies, cmon now. Lets get some feedback in here.

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-High Class a.k.a confusion

dat was hott

Meh... not bad...

Pretty good flow...

Nice start at open mics....

Keep dropping...

Try writing on a deeper topics in the future

breakdown: good flow, good structure, good use of vocab, good rhyme scheme, thought it lacked on wordplay, but u made up for it with some good multi's. but like chrit said try speakin on deeper topics in the future peace.