keystyle
 

I transmit STDs to rappers through these keys-
Please believe-even Bernie Mac couldn't offer comic relief
My skills levitate heavy objects and break hearts-
There's no way to disregard-we can see you're a retard
You can take what you want-go ahead and flaunt-
While i prepare to knockut rounds of emcees-
At the beat of my heart-
I bruise rappers tastelessly-there's no salt on my tongue-
Find a better way to waste the air in ya lungs-
Before you get flung-stabbed-and stung
Run rabbit run-Ya done faggot done-
Shunned stunned and bummed-sittin on that corner-
Waitin for a ambulance to come-
No sirens yet- how could you be smashed by nothing?
My words are weapons of multiple orgies-they keep comin
So when you get to wheezin and pantin
My words are squeezin and slammin-
With the transparancy of the opera phantom
This ain't a scooby doo mystery bitch-its KEYS
With enough degrees in heat-
To be a scholar from the Ivy League
Sweetheart it ain't a game to me- i beat it already-
mic skills carvin emcees from skin to spaghetti
It's over-there's no more-you can't catch up-
You write freestyles and say what you write is ya best stuff
Mothafuckas...

Post your replies up, thanks bud.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87961
Thats the rules thread if you need more info.

i think this is hot, nice flow and everything
get ur reps up so it doesnt close
holla at my new open

yo i think this was tight yo came hard in da start but started to fall off towards da middle but by da time da end came u was back on top overall i think it was tight

nicest lines in this piece:

"I transmit STDs to rappers through these keys-..."

"...Find a better way to waste the air in ya lungs-..."

"....My words are weapons of multiple orgies-they keep comin..."

"...Sweetheart it ain't a game to me- i beat it already-
mic skills carvin emcees from skin to spaghetti..."

I like this one. You did a good job. I ain't to cool about the Eminem comment 'cause I'm a fan. I liked the comparisons you made to the opera phantom and scoody doo. Great stuff. A line that I think sucks? While i prepare to knockut rounds of emcees-
At the beat of my heart- That line makes the flow a little off. But overall, good keystyle. Nice elevation.

It wasn't about em it was like 8-mile...nice crit y'all uppin 4 more