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[Physiatrists. Bridges]
No amount of dentistry can build this bridge
My tongue never touches the ridge Yet I remember what I did Or didn't Have the tender touch to give It was hidden I wasn't really forgiven When things got slippery I forgot my epitome It brought on misery I thought I couldn't bare The clothes i bought her She just wouldn't ware I stood in despair When I caught her. . Telling our daughter 'Your dads got a drink problem' I was soon to start to think 'Bitch you better start grovelling' 'But darling, Your heart shrinks' I stood wandering why this tart winks' 'Don't worry, we've just struck a glitch 'BE QUIET! Now ima have to fuck this snitch' So I grabbed hold of her While her worry sweated 'Bitch, Now your gonna get it' Next time you want a bit of rough I'll give you your own clit to love 'How can you hit your hub!?' Next. . I remember being knocked out Next thing her knockers were out Spread all over the coach Pretty much like I am 'But she screamed ouch' Saying. . 'I know your my spouse But I only gave you my hand I never gave you my virginia' But I stopped & let her stand Yelling ' Pussy here for a fiver' But know one wanted to speak So I fronted this freak Who was really my wife Then started to beat her Right infront of my daughters site Then my feet grew weeker As I fainted at her site & dropped right infront of her sneekers When tainted sad words incite But. . From here on I keep clear from wrong Yet. . I hold this in debt Lodged in my chest Bodged not to confess That it was me!! Who ripped my wifes dress & made her bruised badly While my little girl grew up sadly With this bridge callapsing From time to time What I lived was relapsing Then try to find Mine to thier minds But can't. . Only find my feet wet from the water My daughter know soaks it up From plants & now all her blokes have no luck Maybe from!? When she caught me Crazy & dumb Now I live cautoiusly Remoursefully. . |
Post your replies up, thanks bud.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87961 Thats the rules thread if you need more info. |
Yo, this is the new style again, the structure did suck terribly, but oh well, lets see if you prefer the flow, since its not so repetitive. .
Links http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8486#post918486 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=92853 |
Its ok
Structure sucked..but the flow was nice kinda poetry flow tho, but just go back to writin ..the way u write..not..u know what i mean = ).. Who was really my wife Then started to beat her Right infront of my daughters site Then my feet grew weeker As I fainted at her site Wsnt feelin the double site in it,..but it seems it was rushed, Im not feelin ur new style :p It looks ...olso..yea how u say ^^ and the rhyme was sometimes of, on some point.. But oh well, ..i only write songs so who am i .. Pz |
good job my man... i was feeling this all the wya yo
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This was an OK one. I think this a better poem than a rap. It had some really good personal shit.
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