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Dont Call (personal shit.. deep)
This Was A Track On My Fuckin Father..
Or Whatever He Is.. Its To THe eminem "KIM" Beat.. SO Go With It From There.. This Will Be On My Album Also Fuck You.. Fuck Tha Shit You Put Me Through.. Don’t Chu Every Fuckin Call Me.. I’ll Be Too Fuckin Busy To Answer You.. (Verse 1) Lemme Make This Real Clear, Cuz I Want You To Hear This Shit.. I’d Say You Play’d A Role In My Life.. But You Was Only There For 2 Years Of It.. N’ You Wonder Why She Left Chu n’ Ya Life In Pieces.. Maybe Its Cuz She Didn’t Wanna See Her Fuckin 2 yr. Kid Get Beaten.. N’ We Know Ya Secret.. How Dumb Do You Honestly Think We Are?!.. Say Your Goin To Rehab.. N’ Locate Ya Ass At Tha Fuckin Bar.. So Now You Wanna Know How Tha Fuck I Am- And I Don’t Give A Damn To Know Who The Fuck You Are!.. A Little Boy Watchin An Empty Road, n’ View The Relationship That Broke Up.. Didn’t Move For 4 Fuckin Hours til’ I Realized You Never Bothered To Show Up.. A Father That Never Grown Up.. Theirs No Hope In That.. N’ How You Gon’ Tell Your Kid That When You Had Him.. U Was Fuckin Hooked On Crack!?.. Remember Awhile Back.. When Me n’ Jeff Stopped To See Whats Up.. Finally Realized How Much My Life Was Fucked Up- -When You Chased Me, Shirt Off.. Down The Street Drunk.. Callin Me Everytime You Remember Im There, Tellin Me You Love Me? I Laugh.. Cuz It’s the Same Difference If You Speakin Out Ya Mouth.. Or Talkin Out Cha Ass.. The Hell With The People You Know.. I’m Dreadin Their Faces.. Lets Face It.. You Know Tha Past.. n’ Still Question- -Why I Didn’t Accept Ya Fuckin Weddin Invitation!?.. I’m Old Enuff To Tell You If You Talk To Me Wrong.. Ima Fuckin Hit You.. You Don’t Know How Old I Am, What Grade Im In- -Hell, You Didn’t Even Fuckin Know I Rapped Now Did You!?.. God, That’s It Dude.. Keep Remindin Me Me That You My Only Father- -N’ They’ll Never Be No One Like You’d Start.. When A Complete Fuckin Stranger Is More A Father Figure Than You Are.. You Contributed The Sperm, But A Father? You Hide It.. N’ If Dirt-Bag Had A Fuckin Name.. You Defined It.. You Cant Patch This.. Child Support Checks, Of Shit Chu Cost Bitch.. I Got 16 Years Of Material Jus Sittin Around To Piss You Off With.. Rip You Off It.. You Was Real Man Til’ You Turned For Faker.. I Liked Recievin Ya Letters From Jail- -They Made For Good Fuckin Burnin Paper.. Invite Me To Ya House.. But I Was Told To Say No To Fags.. Oh, N’ I Never Was Busy.. I Just Hate You (That’s Why I Never Wrote You back).. Don’t Get Sad, Cuz You Know Exactly What You Did To Me.. – -You Aint Gotta Be Psychic.. I’ll Call You Up.. Say I’m Comin Over In A Lie..- - Just See How You Fuckin Like iT!.. I’ll Be Tha Son You’ll Never Have.. If I One Day Become Famous.. I’ll Never Mention Your Fuckin Ass.. Hope You Cry For The Laughter You Coulda Done.. N’ When It Comes Down To It.. .. I Rather Be A Fuckin Bastard Than Your Son!!.. Fuck You.. Fuck Tha Shit You Put Me Through.. Don’t Chu Every Fuckin Call Me.. I’ll Be Too Fuckin Busy To Answer You.. (Verse 2) Don’t Call Me, I’ll Be Busy, I Don’t Bother With Faggots.. You’re a Fuckin Sperm Donor Cuz You Don’t Fit The Father Status.. There It Is, Bare This Shit.. Faggot Left In Embarrassment.. You Wont Get My Invitation- So Don’t Bother To Show Up At My Marriages.. N’ When You Die, n’ I’m Prone To Access.. Only Reason I Come To Your Funeral- -Is To Piss On Your Fuckin Face In An Open Casket.. You Lost Me, You Don’t Know How Much Of A Bitch You Are, Now Do You?.. Shit, I Know Fuckin Animals Who Gotta Fuckin Life Than You Do.. You’ve Caused So Much Pain, I’m Startin To Like The Hurt.. N’ Find If Fuckin Hilarious When I Heard You Ride A Fuckin Bike To Work.. But That’s My Price For Words.. n’ If A Punch Is Love.. Then I Wont Duck n’ Run, Enuffs Enuff..Punch For Punch til’ I Fuck You Up.. You Fuckin Chump.. I Been w/o You For 16 Yrs- -So Don’t Expect Me To Miss You.. I Fuckin Hate You!.. n’ That’s Just Bein Real Wit Chu.. Fuck You, Fuck Your Life, I Don’t Need Love From You.. You Love Is Garbage, Your Fathering is Bullshit- -oh, N’ Your Weed Sux Too.. All You Ever Meant To Me Was Less Than Nothing.. So It’s the Same Difference If You Lived Next Door- -Or Out Tha Country.. Fuckin Punk, Callin Me Drunk, Thinkin Its All Right.. Maybe If We’re Lucky.. You’ll Fuckin Die In A Bar Fight.. Disconnect My Phones Cuz You Wont Stop Callin, Man You Fucked Up.. Trust Me, You Doin Nothin Is Enuff To Ruin So Fuckin Much.. Took A Shit Ride, I’ve Already Done That.. Not Even Gon’ Bother.. When You Die.. I’ll Remember A Scum Bag.. Not A Fucking Father!.. Fuck You.. Fuck Tha Shit You Put Me Through.. Don’t Chu Every Fuckin Call Me.. I’ll Be Too Fuckin Busy To Answer You.. |
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Really Tired And Frustrated After Writing That I'll Edit This With My Feebacks |
That is dope in my opinion. I felt what you were saying. I think that it was a nice piece.
By The Way: Rap Battles sucks dick... Go To Hiphop Dialect.com |
God...The emotions were unbelievable in this piece. You layed out your feelings in a creative way, more than venting, but less than spazzing out. You did a beautiful job with this piece, it came out excellent. Wow..Im amazed, good drop.
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Alot Of Feeling'
Is Dis True... Cuz I Wuz Definitly Feelin You On Dis One... I Specially Liked Da Part "Didnt Know I Rapped Now Did You"... Dat Wuz Real Nice... Good Subject... Feelin It Homie... One... -P |
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hit the nail on the head APART FROM THE HHP STUFF 'spicious i dint know ya cud hit shit like this...damn bra that was hard hittin...i know i sound like a fag but i was gettin a damn lump in ma throat...me n ma dad arent close but it sounds like ya dont really want yours t live...feelings are very clear here...could ya pm me with any audio shit you have? ratin=10/10 |
Very emotional, well thought, good flow and rhyme scheme. I was feeling this homie, you showed alot of skill. Keep writen this shit, our rap style is kinda tha same. Ge peep my shit " Closed Doors" Not my deepest one, but it tells somthing that went on in my life. Its not long, so dont worrie about waisten your time either.
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that shit was hot .one eminem my idol and i can see this went really well to da beat of that song so much respect to u. i like the vocab and the flow of this hey cheak out my shit under poetic scriptures it called dear mom
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Thanks..
Yes This Is True.. I Get Frustrated Everytime I Write it Or Spit it To Myself.. If You've Been In My Situation You Know HOw it Feels. But I'll Drop Sum Feedback Now.. Just Got Too Pissed Off At Myself When I Wrote This.. Audio Sometime in The NExt Two Weeks.. n' Im Not Gon' Hesitate The Blow The Track Up.. You Felt Me Here, Then Your Gon' Feel Me Even More When I Drop On Audio |
this shit was sweet man fuck it made me think about all the shit that pissses me off in my life
so u pissed me off for makin me feel that way :mad: jk anyway fuck emotion out the ying yang i felt this a lot nice imagery good shit much props peace |
Thanks Bro..
Much Appreciated Feedback On.. ^^ That Kids Piece LoCo n' Withersmith |
Re: Dont Call (personal shit.. deep)
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^^^ That was dope. This pice was amazing. The emotion was just flawless. Keep spittin. And check your pms. |
dude good shit
lotta emotion and good vocab good visuals too much info...lol real good verses http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=93377 if ya could ^^^ |
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Emotional, Deep, excellent peice.
Felt it real bad. I know there is possibly nothing i can say ot make matters better, but i can say that this peice was written very very well. When it sounds good in writing, it will sound excellent on audio. Make sure you post it on the site or something. Vocab was good, way to stay with it, and nice use of flow, it was good. Overall-9/10... 1 point reducted cuz i wasnt really feelin the chorus, but it was still good |
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