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jego 11-21-03 12:30 AM

another keystyle
 
attack climactic habits
um....

loki, straitjackit, walter wall

created my own vampire so the sun could watch me stab at it
walter ego bit my neck
then scrapped a bout with the fire breathin fly winged insect
injected with serotonin--mistaken for calogen
put her through college n' the pains still growin
like sitcoms with sick moms, big proms, and tin prongs
to hip songs, tryna get her tits on
hit records, broken over needles,
ive shattered respected lectures and stepped on black beetles
im no speedy reader
not whitty either
but i can make a theater of eythr at the sound of beeper
like a genius kid fetal
ive shattered respected lectures and stepped on black beetles
hit records and broken needles
fought for real good, grew up on roots of evil
the real deal, like a stick on aluminum foil gold seal

not a normal flow on this one....but yeah
check it. feedback?

jego 11-21-03 12:32 AM

shit,

attack climactic habits
created my own vampire so the sun could watch me stab at it

ingore the shit in between, that was supposed to go at the top

jego 11-21-03 08:50 PM

UPPIN FOR SOME FEED

NewPort 11-21-03 08:52 PM

Umm.. Work.. Ya Flow Was Basic
Ya Got 90's Style Rap.. Easily Flowable WOrds
Anyone Could Do That

BIGjoke 11-21-03 09:46 PM

uh i thaught it was okay............
the flow actually needs a lil work but i saw what u was doin
i understood it too
if it was a battle u woulda needed metas too
but its just a keystyle

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Peepers 11-21-03 11:50 PM

word man, flow was tight as hell on this peice...great vocab, loved your word choice....but the content was weak, you had no single message you were talking about, you bounced around for no reason, that made this peice suck man.....you gotta write about something to make it interesting, we'v all seen rhymes before man....

return the favor

peace

jego 11-22-03 03:09 AM

i dont stay on a message, i think thats limiting, unless i got somethin specifically to write about. i write on my ideas and my belifes and feelings, our thoughts often jump around a bit, but aways revolve around the same thought.

JaYDeE 11-22-03 04:09 PM

I think the fl0w waz aight, yea it waz basic, but i kn0w whucha mean. n 4 Auspicious... y0u'z a fuckin h0m0 d00d, rippin 0n 0thah people'z stylez sayin itz basic n shiet, h0wa b0ut this, y0ur fl0w bl0wz ass, 0nly reas0n u as g00d as u is, is because u g0t dickriderz v0tin 4 ya, h0wa b0ut da truth h0m0thug


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