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My Intro
Take-The-Chance At First Glance Masscre's Seem Romanced..
Watch To Retract N Enhance A Level Thats Too Advanced.. I Follow My Aggresion Through-A-Dangerous Depression.. So-My-Confession Appears Naked N Violated With No Lesson.. Learned Specially-Split Rotting Down The Middle Of This Earth.. Riddles Designed Specifically To Notice Humans At Its-Worst.. Born-With-No-Ambition Just Staying-With-Daytime-Confusion.. Scoled-With-No-Vision Yet I Struggle With A Paralysing-Illusion.. Picture-Thousand-Words Telling The Same Corrupt-Lies.. Tension In Our Eyes With Fabricated Thoughts To Sense The Rise.. A Misguided Directed-Concept Blinded By When Nothing To-Detect.. Merge-Times As Lines-Show-Hate With-Nothing-But-Love-To-Infect.. A-Immortal-Seige Where Love Meets Death And Pain Reaches-Its-Peak.. Speech-Misused Those Who Teach-To-Fuse Lifes But Is Chosen-Deep.. When-God Calls Will U Even Be Mourned Or Become-Another-Issue.. They-Say Whats Outspoken Is Spoken By The Dead-Cells-In-A-Tissue.. If So Then My Mind Must-Have-Been-Orginated From-A-Mental-Facility.. Elevating-Past-My-Ability To Slate-You-N-Me But Losing-My-Orginal-Capability.. Whats-Is True-To-You Will Be Scarred-And Clear To Show In A Virute.. Locked In A Interlude This Is Only A Echo-Of-A-Grin Still-Blocked By-Views.. But The Flames Lit...And Watch Grim Minds Fall Into a Morbid Raw Pit.. The-Brains-Hit As My Body-Is-Rip Still-Tho My Agony I Only Forced-It.. Time-Is-Of-The-Essence But To Me Its All A Waste-Of-Life.. In My Deep Fantasy I Still Plauged In The Corner To Sit-And-Write.. By The Hour I Cower My Power To Freeze Any Aggression.. By This Minute Clocking Down I Plead With My Evil-Impression.. |
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nice shit 7.6/10
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ill mate...........................But ya must be an alias to do that good as a newbie????????????? 7 or 8/10 bruv
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good looks my niga
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Thanks for posting up the links, most of the people who are newer don't even bother reading the rules, so thanks.
By the way, its three replies. Don't bother posting up another link though, you gave two on your own for your first thread in the Open Mic, so its cool. |
Pretty good. This said a lot of shit. I thought it was very deep. Nice wordplay. I really have nothing bad to say about this one. Probably because I don't think I'm that good. Ha.
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good looks my nucka
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i liked that. the multies were good and so was the choice of words. keep postin, i think u'll be real good
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yeah man i agree this was some nicesit, dont look like newb writtin to me, but good none the less, some nice vocab and multis. keep at it, ill be looking out for more.....Pz
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I Like your style yo
lol @ people thinkin you a newbie coz your title says new to rb Anyway props to you on this piece you got pretty Dope vocab too if you ever wanna do a collab in audio or text lemme know 8/10 Peace |
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