dis iz 1 i fought of time ago
 

even though this rap shit is kinda new 2 me//
i'm neva gona leave as if my name was lumidee (uh oh)
i'm a player right,cause me and ur wifey were fuckin 2nite//
and u a pussy, u can't even put up a fight//
or put up your fists//
its too late for apoligies i'm already pissed//
and no need 4 ur backup cause it doesnt exist//
and now ur on the list//
of the one's 2 get rid//
ima empty the clip//
blow the top off ur lid//
and b a pain in the ass like a ten year bid//
but it wouldn't matter 2 u u'd probably like dat//
i bet if someone dropped da soap ud b like i'll b rite back//
just face it ur whack u'll neva b the greatest//
i'm betta than u and im the latest//
and don't bother responding u'll take too long//
besides u wouldnt ever beat this song//.

But I know I would beat this song for sure. Keep elevatin. Plus if this was a diss towards me, then it wasnt nothin. Peace.

bet if someone dropped da soap ud b like i'll b rite back//
just face it ur whack u'll neva b the greatest//
i'm betta than u and im the latest//


hott good work keep up elevation add little goodies in here for more pleasure

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but this was ok....you need to work on structure a bit though, you should try to make your lines about the same length,...the flow was ok could use more multies and internals in this though to help the flow out...overall this was ok, keep elevating though...keep at it and keep dropping.

yo...... this was iight......... could you some more length in ya bars cuz short bars just wasnt pickin up ya flow....... i found this piece a little more mellow than you seemed to want it to be but overall its a nice drop........ keep that shit up yo

wun

What Masta C said.

Thanks Dude.