Corrupted Visions: Can't Let You Go
 

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Every time I close my eyes all I see is your face…
Remembering your lips and their pure taste…
Tasting Sweet like you, I never speak more true..
When I told you….it would just be us two….
Cause from the moment I first felt your lips…
All I ever was…was just dealt four sips….
Of tasting your sweet nectar, it cant be described…
And from that moment, I just wanted you to be mine…
I wanted to live that moment with you as long as I could..
And I would as long as you said you were mine for good..

I just cant let you go…
When your in my arms you glow..
I just cant let you go…
Baby I have so much to show…
I just cant let you go…
Baby I just have to let you know..
I just cant let you go…

All it takes is just one touch to bring a smile to my face…
If you ever went away you would take awhile to replace..
Cause underneath the stars you just shine so bright…
As I look at you all I think is making you mine tonight…
Times not right cause it just went way too fast…
The moment I want to last, I cant turn back to the past..
Cause you aren’t there and it wouldn’t be the same…
And ill be there no matter what when you speak my name…
Cause all I hear is your soft voice…it just lures me in…
So many things I need to say, don’t know where to begin…

I just cant let you go…
When your in my arms you glow..
I just cant let you go…
Baby I have so much to show…
I just cant let you go…
Baby I just have to let you know..
I just cant let you go…

You’re wonderful smile always brightens up my day…
And I could be lost but you always lighten up the way..
Just looking into your eyes makes it hard to breathe…
And when I say goodbye, for me its just hard to leave…
I want to stay with you and hold you in your sleep…
And if loving you was a game, I’d play for keeps…
Cause I cant lose you, I need you here with me…
To hold you and whisper in your ear “kiss me”…
I just want to show you all of my affection…
Cause to me your everything...your perfection…

flow was tight... feelin the emotion
nice

yeah man....this came across good.....stuck to the topic nicely....quite a simple approach.....but it worked...maybe that was cos of the emotion in it,,dunno.......i would say thought the vocab could be expanded on..i think....but nice drop....Pz......

all in all all elements where here and it came nice tight peace

Hey thanks for the feedback so far...Keep the feedback coming in..its much appreciated, thanks.

yo man was a good drop. a good approach to but like deva said the vocab coulda maybe been upped a bit but other then that ur flow was down, the emotion was there, u had some imagery to this piece and u had some good structure work here, I also thought ur hook was down. good job bro if u wanted me to rate this I'd say an 8.5 outta 10. keep droppin bro. peace.

yo nice rhyme man it was tight keep up the good work peace
-KeMy$t

simple but deep enough to keep reading. good drop, maybe a little work on the vocab, but complex vocab wasn't really necessary for the feeling, so 8/10

peace

Yo....This was straight.....Although I've seen waayyy too many posts Like this in open mic already.....*nods slowly*......Flow was nice though.....You stayed on subject....good post....

Hey Thanks For The Feedback So Far, Keep The Feedback Coming In, Its Much Appreciated, Thanks.

Well I'm not a big fan of these types of lyrics,not into them soft shit
but this isnt about my likes,
the flow was there,simple but sweet, the chorus was a bit weak
Nothing really stood out....pretty much basic..and as far as the cat saying a vocab wasnt really needed...well i think it was cuz i think many people would agree....it was pretty much unorginal...
but a overall you get a
5.5/10
next time try to be more creative with you words

Peace....
1............

good as always. flow was perfect, some multies. keep droppin. thanks for hittin mine up too

Hey thanks for the feedback so far...keep the feedback coming in, Its much appreciated, Thanks.

yo dawg that was a Nyce Piece i was feeling ya in that one good Lyrics......but u Vocab could get al little touch up but all round a pretty tight Peice...........


Peace Out Kuz(v)

nice piece.......i give it 7/10........ not my style but i do get on that tip once in a while.......... u gifted kid

wun