The Girl... (DONT SLEEP PLZ)
 

Yea i know this topic (love poem about a girl) is well used but it just came to me so tell me what yall think.

This is dedicated to any girl I've ever loved...

You astound me with your grace and beauty.
How can your appearence and attitude be so great that you obsess me with your image?
I can't stand to not think about you, you're with me everywhere i go.
Your presence silences me, for I cannot talk when im around you.
I'm not shy, or afraid, I'm just waiting for the right time.
i love the way you smile at me, and cheer me up when i am down.
This poem 9s all for you.
I'm not gonna hold anything back as my mind and tounge lyrically unwind.
Could this be love?
The Way you make me feel?
The feeling is too strong to explain on paper.
It is impossible to try to explain the very thing which I love and desire most.
I can't control myself when i am in your presence.
I am a robot around you.
Someone else is inside me and controlling me.
I cannot say waht i want to say to you when I love you this much.
I will love you as long as I live, even after my soul leaves earth.
You always Will Have a place in my heart.
I will always be reserved for you and no one will ever takes its place.
I love you...

Uppin on this please dont sleep...-1-

Uppin on this right here please dont sleep.

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Oh my god what is it with you people. There's only like 5 or 6 peeps on this board who actually post messages on other peeps stuff.


UPPIN!

Sorry sweet. I didnt get on til now. This was an amazing drop. It had madd emotion. I can definitely tell that it is all from your heart. It seems to have a message for every single girl that you have ever cared about and even though you are not together, you will still love them. I felt the emotion and thoughts you had and I loved it. Everything was great on it. This is one of your best. Keep up tha great job sweet. Most respect and much luv.

Thx sweet :) appreciate ure feedback uppin on this piece right here worked hard on it dont sleep.


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This is from the heart man. I know where your coming from you and I relate to this more than perfect. I've found my princess and am happy to be with her. plannin on it for the rest of my life. Again great drop, madd Spect, JT

Thx JT apreciate the feedback.


UPPIN ON THIS HERE DONT SLEEP

my fault.. i hadnt seen this.. lol.. lemme read hold on.. damn its too early for this.. blah

i like this.. the words you used.. the emotion you put into it. a lot of the lines you used i liked... lol ima come back and drop crit later.. too early for me to think. haha :D

there is deffentally alot of emotion in this piece and you can tell that you cared about thoses girls. you can tell that this came from ur heat. i think that this was a great piece keep up da good work

mad points..this reminds me of how i felt with my kim...my queen...you all know if you've read my poems cutting knife of for kim how she made me feel but i cant say i have ever writtin something that touched me this much...dude i can relate to this poem more than any of mine.....aight keep droppin this shit.,....its really good..
MMFCL!!!!
peace

Thx all yall appreciate the feed uppin on this right here.


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I enjoyed it and if someone wrote this about me I would definitly get red in the face, but i think it could have a bit more readibility in other words it didn't flow as much as I would of liked. Keep your head up it's good with truth and heart. Oh look at my rhyme
Forever my Homie pz and luv

i got one word - DEEP

DEEP? Hmmm....i guess its a compliment...lol try to be more specific but yea sall good appreciate the feedback!

Uppin on this HELLO ALI HAHA JIGGA!