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Edicius 11-25-03 11:43 AM

[- Waste of breath..Ft Fgee -]
 
Waste of breath..

Edicius

I'm gonna get drunk , so fuckin drunk ill pass out
but b4 that lettin u in my life and shout it out loud!
I geuss we must give theres not an other thing to do
just take a look at the world, and take a good look at the zoo!
Caged souls die daily from wrong judgements and a twisted truth
we all prisoners in this fucked up society but do we see? no! rather jump of a roof
Than handle situations, we all run but still we stay trapped
and than friends ..so called, if necessary they have u stabbed
There's bein givin a lifetime to the human race by.. themselfs
Like a fish in a bowl swimmin round an round
everyday the same he sick of it! but doesnt make a sound
Becuz he can't his future is allready set..
cuz we dicided what he can and can't and made this bowl his death bed..
Who are we?..we are that fish!
We a waste of time, all the time..al we do is struggle to survive,
but the at the end its over why?..we have bein put in this thing called life?
Seeing the light , growin up struggle to survive and than i die!
all this hard work to ''live'' but for what? it just makes me cry
i try to make something of my life and still it ends with death
walking around just to end up in a box, what a waste of breath..

With my visions and my feelins paintin the streets the colour of my heart


Fgee

Aches and the pains over cloud my drowsy days
A long face weary from the constant reigns taste
An empire of waste brains cogs rusted and grating
Speeches migration seems for ever patient
Faded and jaded by a frozen tongue lacking words
Adjectives, nouns and verbs escape lungs surge
An ironic gifted curse and my breath lacks mettle
Oxygen settled and exhaled in torsos threshold
Nectarless petals of vapour escape from my mouth
Defining doubt all breathing whispers a shout
Contained drought parched my soul now u see cracks
Existence slapped and red from the constant hits
Embarassing skits of a person who cant speak clearly
Wasted breath nearly ceases but air fears me
Loved dearly but it cant fight my battles of silence
So unspoken emotions…are construed by violence

Edicius 11-25-03 11:44 AM

Young black
Rule
Set-ignorance

....BaSh.... 11-25-03 11:49 AM

This piece was hot , both MCs stayed on topic. The rhyme scheme was iLL and Fgee's content was nice!!!!Overall this was a sick collab

Hannibal Lector 11-25-03 04:09 PM

nice shit dogg

fgee 11-25-03 10:05 PM

upper

2hOt4tV 11-25-03 10:08 PM

NICE SHIT.nice collab,nice words

Edicius 11-26-03 10:06 AM

Pff


Up^

fgee 11-27-03 07:07 AM

upping again

Edicius 11-27-03 07:42 AM

Omg ..


Can we get some decent replys plz

rule 11-27-03 04:13 PM

damn, this bein slept on...but a very thought out poem, great vocab from both..it had a canstant photo of feeling showing good thoughts on this....great flow and structure....good drop....9/10, pz

Edicius 11-27-03 05:41 PM

Thnx

Up^

Baron Mynd 11-27-03 06:24 PM

Nice shit dawg

Fgee's really was a waste of breath .. and time .. and effort

holla!

Dev 11-27-03 08:44 PM

yeah i agree both these verses were tight.....nice topic and stuck too good......both well structured....although i prefered edicius's flow.....some nice vocab......all round well put together...liked it.....Pz

Edicius 11-29-03 07:45 PM

Lol @ cam..

Thnx all Upp3r..^

Edicius 12-03-03 08:51 AM

Up!


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