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[week 6]9. A2Z (2-1) vs 10.brixton (2-0)
topic: A window to escape
Due:dec. 1 voting ends: dec 5th |
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in, 'll drop today, right now
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Jack Was Unlucky...Wrong Place, Wrong Time
Got Busted Wrongfully...Now Serving 25 To Life Hes Rotting In A Cell...Akin To A Wild Lion Caged Having Lost All Personality...Just A Number, No Name Staring Out His Window...But Always Failing To See His Soul Remains A Widow...Mourning His Identity Cellmates With No Feelings...Satan Spawn Them All Making Jack's Stomach Churn... And His Spirits Fall Dim Lights Illuminate...All That Depleted Jack Has Left A Lifetime Of Prison Food...& A Rugged, Shallow Breath Blasted Window Stays...Constantly Showing Jack The Error In His Ways...& What He Could Never Have Appeals All Tossed Aside... Pain Consumed His Days But It Always Ate Inside...The Window To Escape Visitors Remained At None...They Were Strictly Forbode But Finally His Plans Were Done...Break Out On His Own That Window Had Showed...The Way To Live A Free Life He Must Break Out Or Die Trying...And Slip Into The Night Many Months Had Passed...Waiting For The Perfect Time Day Had Finally Come At Last... The Smell Of Grass Divine The Day Drew Slowly...Clock's Hands, They Seemed To Stall Plate Stamping Irrelevant...In The Superior Light Of It All Dawn Into Noon...At A Slug Pace, Noon Drew Into Dusk Jack Had To Swallow A File...Guards Search Every Orethesis That Night The Light Clicked..& Prison Plummeted Into Dark All Except For Jack... He Slowly Crept To The Window Bars Chiseling Of The Bars Done...No Inmate Would Ever Forget The Day Jack Had Tried To Run..And Got A Bullet In The Head. |
.....Blissfully intwined in that thing you call Hesitation.....
.....the only other respect I give is to Divine Intervention..... .....see both of these affect your life,In 1 way or Another..... .....from the seed of all Creation, to the life of your own Brother..... .....there feelings that are uncomfortable I jus cant describe..... .....a compendium without the flow & a Song w/out the Vibe..... .....its not easy to Define and to Hollow to cross the Line..... .....if i could stand the truth then I'd make this Sonnet Mine..... .....but in a way wot can i say...i stand tomorrow, i stand Today..... .....I strive to make it years Away to maybe watch my Child Play..... .....Explicit as it is...A Window to Escape is jus Solitude..... .....for an over exemped mind..w/ a Conflicting Attitude..... .....Devastating news for those who think they can Hide Behind..... .....a Personality thats Dark N Grim, wen in all Truth you're Kind..... .....Aggrevated Deception is another form of your Exemption..... .....like a kid made to pay...still locked up in Detention..... .....your still praying for Attention but i can't give it Out..... .....my minds still unMatured..i can't tell you what its About..... .....jus useless Advice locked up in a Grip Tight Vice..... .....the Window goes to whole new levels jus like House Mice..... .....so was the peace Affective...Did it help you to Make..... .....a decision that prevents you...avoiding a Window of Escape..... |
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a2z dont forget to put ya three battles up....................
____________________________________________ pz my angel of brian may |
A2Z - That was a nice verse, very good imagery. I pictured the whole thing through my mind. You had pretty good vocab, and your rhyme scheme didnt mess with the flow. I normal onr would, big up on that one. It was good on the topic, I felt how that person is feelings. Very nice hommie... 9 / 10
PhiL - You had a good verse to hommie. You lacked the imagery, and kinda a downfall on the vote. You had good flow, nice rhyme scheme. I was feeling how you took it, maybe could have been longer. But I have the same problem. It was just a nice drop, but didnt grab my attention to much. Keep elevatin Hommie, Nice drop... 8 / 10 Vote - A2Z OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
Decent Battle..
Phil Is Still Learnin A2Z Is Still Improvin Phils Verse Wasnt Together.. A2Z, Well He Knows.. Next Time Make It Better.. A2Z Gets My Vote.. ^ n' Im Dope A2Z Had An Overal Better Verse Vote - A2Z |
that was great explainin!!! ????????????????????????
huh...no wonder title was stripped...... |
Omg. .What A Whiner.. Title Was Stripped Cuz Of A mix Up
In IPs So Shut Up Fuck Roll.. Jesus.. For The Bitch.. A2Z's Rhyme Scheme Was Better Than Yours.. He Had An Overall Better Flow To His. He Had A Wittier Verse Than Yours. Yours Was Simple.. And Thought A2z Had Sumwhat Of A Played Concept, He Used It Well. You Weren't Horrible. I'll Give You That, But You Didn't Possess Enough To Pull Of The Win In This Match.. Damn Get an Attitude Readjustment |
lol..i was playin but i appreciate the further explanation...peeps deserve a decent explanation..thats all i wanted..not you sayin you were dope and rhyming about the vote..no hate pz
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I'd like to ask something, A2z...
How the fuck do you swallow and then pass a file? Sounds slightly impossible, my man. Not to mention, excruciating. Anyway... I'm gonna have ta go against the majority here and toss my vote to Brix or whatever fuckin name he's goin by now. I thought the story A2z brought has been told a thousand times. I didn't think he told it in a manner that brought any freshness or newness to it. Brix surprised me by hitting some nice vocab, real good flow, and some good complexity. I agree with whoever said he lacked imagery, true, true. But I've seen A2z's imagery in at least a dozen different movies. No beef, both verses were good, just didn't vibe with one as well as the other. Final vote: Brixton Peace |
I thought A27 Took this........his story gripped me
and wouldnt let me go.......great imagery and a v. nice concept Brix...V.good my man, you get better every week a nice solid verse but didnt quite have the creativity in my eyes Props Brix...you show alot of potential... V. A2Z |
ya'll right about imagery here...i dint really go for a story here jus more of a feeling thing....its aight tho...1-3
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