Open woundz
 

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WHAT I'VE REPLIED TO^^^^^^^^^^

My open woundz bleed arsenic...Poisonous Fumes engage
Filled with a rage...Spit the blood from my woundz upon the page
My life span fade'z as the walls of my lungz begin to cave
But look deeper in the wayz...Only got Myself to blame
Breathe in the deadly elixer...My Salvation comes Quicker
No longer the pain eats me away...20 million times sicker
Than I was before,Unable to ignore the call of the darkside
My Mind state'z Hard to find,Left behind,Sittin in corner,Tries to hide
I'll find, the way my Sanity'z playin tricks, Cold hits like brickz
Visions of myself bein burnt Joan Of Ark style,on a crusifix
It'z got a hold of my soul and It'll never let go,not never
I can't rest Til me and The lost are back together

this was short but sweet... ur flow was on point, you had some hot vocabulary... work on the multi's though....

My open woundz bleed arsenic...Poisonous Fumes engage
Filled with a rage...Spit the blood from my woundz upon the page

I'll find, the way my Sanity'z playin tricks, Cold hits like brickz
Visions of myself bein burnt Joan Of Ark style,on a crusifix

^^^ i loved those lines ^^^

you seem to be hiding the true meaning of something deeper... but nonetheless, this was a very nice piece.... peace

8/10

thanx mate....feedbak

That was hot. short and to the point. good vocab. keep droppin.

i love drops that aren't too long, real nice, loved it man

8/10

uppin

good day old chat, nice rap.

Thanx

Hot short and to the point rhyme keep doin what u doin

Yeah man this was pretty good....it was short but it made a good read i thought.....you structured it pretty well....Your vocab was good doesnt need up'd really at all....the flow to this was alright got off a bit i thought but nothing big....overall this was a good piece.