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Phuture Courses w/ Aisle Five

Aisle - followed by Avah.

Seemingly The only ones here, Were These among the first creations?
And bones have been collected, Yet their still lacks a foundation
Condemned underground, And the skeletons are deemed weak and brittle
More and more info is discovered, Originated from something so little
Sacred scriptures- In the midst of confusion A Bible gets ressurected
In the Eye Of God, It was the presence of Our Generation he requested
Income Wrong Ideas... As Picasso Paintings are the first discovered
And if there are no words, How shall they comunicate to their lover?
Technology is at their feet, And they know not the uses of a plug
All of Man is wiped out, Now How'd you survive I ask the petty bug
They're getting stuck, All these possibilities but still no answer
Digging up so much Data, But Were Still Stuck.. And Now My Hands Hurt

Acronyms - currently cherished on the splendid side incredibly
Why celebrate life's devices which tend to emphasize its brevity?
Fucking silly; new life forms sigh & hope to relieve their patience
Whilst cracking our lingual systems to decode abbreviations
Corrected spiels, neglected deals make way with hectic squeals. .
For an arrival rivaling Fifty Cent's. ._ That is, in his respective field
They'll land in an instant - in troughs that will corrode our plights
Onlookers trash ex-scientists as we scoff at so-called prototypes
Unbalanced as ever, the future looks to be an invalid endeavor
The field's short of experts; think you're rounded and clever?
Heed advice, pshh - never listen, you'll miss the skies, arresting me. .
& the ideas I hold; go ahead. .

Keep trying to simplify complexity

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I'll edit two more tomorrow, but I'm quite fatigued @ the moment . . Take my word for it.

this was a dope piece
everything went nice
keep droppin'
7.8/10

Nyce one guys i recon it came alltogether well i'll give ya 8/10

Aight Peace

OVERALL I CAN ONLY SAY DAMN REAL NCE WORK

Flow - Didnt fall off at all, so thats good
Vocab - You added some really good vocab in there.
Multies - Didnt see to many, but its straight
Allusions - Pretty good with the allusions
Imagery - Very nice imagery, good part of this flow.
Rhyme Scheme - Simple, but it didnt fade the eddectivness
Topic - I felt you were expressing your mind, so thats a good thing. You didnt say the topic. But I understand what you wrote.
Rateing - 7.5-8.0 / 10

Very good drop hommie. Stay up, and keep elevatin.

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

Uppin.. don't sleep on a G.Hod and Aisle 5 collabo!

Haven't upped this in a while. .

Uppin.

shit was hot flow was good vocab good punches ight mutlis good wordplay ight over all 7.5-8/10

damn A5...i take it back your not that overrated

dont i feel stupid

p.s. nice job here, in my eyes it takes alot to roll with G. Hod and you did well

*smacks himself*

stupid, stupid, stupid...

Hmm ... Im guessin' this been up a while but this is my first time seein' it ... Dope job from both of you ... Very nice collab ... Nice concept too ... Both of ya'll had dope verses on the concept ... I can't really say one was better than the other in this collab cuz both of ya'll dropped sickly ... Keep doin' ya'lls thing ... Peace

Nice job fellas.
Aisle, nice way to start the piece off. Your structure is good, but thats something that you need not worry too much about, it just helps making it easier to read. The way you presented your thoughts, your writer's voice, and the amount of implied metaphors made your verse a nice read.
G.Hod, everything I have read from you has a certain level of complexity. Sometimes I need a dictionary. Your vocabulary is definately off the shizzlebulb...(...) Your closing line was incredibly dope, and topped off this wonderful read by both of you. Nice to see something good in O.M

damn boys, dats some shit, don't think i blinked once during the read, vocab, flow, structure all amazing, if i can find one thing to bitch about its multis, you had rhyme continuation but the multis wern't there, but everything else made up for that easily. topic was insane too, that little piece at the end, trying to simplify complexity was ill too, damn...