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Zneval 11-30-03 01:44 AM

Driving Home
 
[driving a way in silence
the engine growling as though it was a homeless stomach
this cabin steadily becoming my dreamy abode
wearily, i awaken, finding myself sadly alone.
the defroster is doing double time
trying to erase your ever present presence
as i do all i can to keep it.
the oncoming headlights are as bright as your outgoingness
if only i could converse with them as i do with you.
these reflective waters are fooling me,
tricking me into thinking i'm wishing upon placid stars
as i begin to see double through my watery eyes.
dying to use tissues on issues rather than death,
i pressure my eyes with each waivering goodbye i give
farewells have never fared well with me,
but we're all always living for tomorrow.
i am continually arriving at yesterday's doorstep,
the engine dying the same way it has for years,
the valiant frost finally clearing,
as i silently arrive so far from home.]

Dr.Gonzo 11-30-03 03:41 PM

Pretty nice peice

you dident seem to have a ryme scheme of any kind but im kinda thinking you did that on purpose

it was kinda hard to read at some spots but overall good


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