early
 

it's 6 o' clock and i just woke up/
get out a bowl and a coffee cup/
i grab the cereal and milk and put it into my bowl/
and put the cereal into the fridge where it is cold/
i put the milk in the cupboard, where it belongs/
i notice the smell when i get back from bein' gone/
i opened the cupboard, what did i see?/
some chunky ass milk, waitin' for me/
with anger i threw it in the street/
wonderin' how it got there, then i took a seat/
i don't remember gettin' out that stuff/
when i saw the cereal, i fucken had enough/
i stood on my table, with a rope around my neck/
kicked away the table and choked just a sec/

i hate monday mornins

You ryhmed it well for a completely useless topic.
Vocab was good but I won't say up it coz your tellin a story and vocab aint that important.
To improve pick a topic which people will feel.
Overall 6/10

be sure to check out 'love you,hate you' when it drops....it's gon' be amazin

lmfao this shit is aight playa it sounds like sum old school snoop doggy dogg shit because thats what he would rap about back then....its coo

This wasn't good at all.. It was one of the worst piece I've seen.. You could of taken this topic really quite deep & painted a picture.. Instead you brung it ever so basic.. = (

Pz.

reply to three open mics, and post links to your replies here, otherwise this thread will be deleted.
thanks.

QUITE A WEAK PIECE............UP THE VOCAB AND GET A TOPIC 2 WRITE ABOUT

dawg you need to pick a topic..that way people would be more into it..your flow was aiight..your creativity was also aiight..use some imagary and vocab, then u'll be str8..6/10

return the favor: check my open mic's

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95506


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95629

this was a tight piece but calm down playa DON'T CRY OVER SPOILT MILK ya herd