Slavery Collab
 

some of u might have seen this on another board if not then good :)

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...2522#post952522
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...2530#post952530


unique-my home girl she mad talented pretty sure could murk mad niggaz n bytches on here
XxDoWnSyNdRuMxX-Me :) of coarse ..this is da last open mic material ive done so far

Unique...

A disgrace, misusage of words with hate refusing to break
Abusing the race then death and horror was usually ur fate
Including the rape, the pain and shame that we rudely would take
But cooly we praised and waited for the truthfully saints
Tested in crops, hot and sweated..molested with wasps
Pocession was lost, but we were afraid and neglected by boss
What came to this plot? We were stupid, affected and caught
Africans selling their own kind..stupidity costs
Who really thought that we would make it in hellbounds failed mode
We wouldnt, with out the helping of Tubman's underground railroad
The eloquence and benelovence of Martin Luther King
The bruises, contusions and swings that Don King received
This mood brings me to hate my own race and it becomes vital
All that work and we back where we started..its a sick cycle

XxDoWnSyNdRuMxX...

Given powers to the white man of cowards that made our ancestors struggle for hours-
dreams were sour,screams grew louder while being struck with belts left with whelts to poke outward-
interracial births instant racial slurs occurred through curse words-
sip thru tin' cups quenching the thirst while they continued to pick cotton from earth-
sleep awake to sneek escape through the jungle of trees-
bundle of weeds covered scrapes and wounds underneath the feet-
pain was killer but no pills to ease them-
wished for freedom but got nothing more then chains to feet with a dirty dog to lead em-
unexplainable difficult times of disaster moved faster-
always had to worry about master finding out they been educated thru chapters-
"the truth shall set you free"? my people made sure they were honest just for that plead-
whipz made backs bleed rubbing alcohol was gruesome to flesh but made a slight ease-
look back on these days thank god I wasn't there to experience their bravery-
its sad to see our ancestors suffer through the renaissance of slavery-

Uppin smh

This wasnt bad actually .. I really got into Unique's verse, he's pretty decent. Flow, internals and multi's worked well .. contenet got shaky at times and wavered a little of topic but he picked it back up well ..

Keymo .. you seemed to try to get too many multi's into each bar and that threw the flow to me, content suffered a lot because of that .. although, you actually stuck to the topic fairly where, got your point across which i thought was done well .. writers voice was there, transition was actually good, its just your flow that could use work .. dont try to force every line with multi's, it takes away from your content, use them .. just dont over-use them if you get my point.

Decent collab though overall. :)

Reply to mine: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95933

you need to reply to one more open mic, and post the links with your other ones.
thanks.