Cold Equations(i was bored)
 

Cold Equations

Cold Equations
The lesser of two evils or the better of two rights
A taste of an eternity or a sacrifice of life
The shunning of pride or a rise of newfound glory
Just a chapter of fate in a sphere’s blue bound story

Cold Equations
Prearranged ignorance without a single sole asking
Time defying moments that may render everlasting
Suppression of emotion and thoughts that used to be free
A revelation of risk, impossible to predict or perceive

Cold Equations
An epiphany of changes and an expense with no cost
Indefinite solutions spent yet acclaimed with no lost
The hidden heart of entropy with the absence of care
God’s_mind's_design_existing to prove that life is unfair

its wut makes the meaning of abstract special....
figure it out urselves...
peACE

I enjoyed the piece felt it had some very nice moments...i have some questions...

An epiphany of changes and an expense with no cost

When you say expense with no cost..its hard to believe theres an expense but no cost...could you elaborate on that....


The hidden heart of entropy with the absence of care
God’s_mind's_design_existing to prove that life is unfair

Are you trying to say that God is the entropy and his ideal of his existing design is failure......?

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thanx for the feedback:

answer 1- people do have a say in their lives, the choices we make govern
our paths in life, however, there are times wen we are given choices that we
ourselves cannot make, either someone makes them for us or no matter wut
anyone does, wutever it is will happen. wen something happens that can
not be countered by any mean, something is expended, but there is no cost
becuz no matter wut, in one way or another, it was never really there...

answer 2-wut i'm basically doing is saying that there is a bond between God
and entropy. however, the type of bond and all other characteristics of it go
unknown. and not that God's design is a failure, but that there is one and
only he can see it...

hope this helps...
thanx again...

peACE

good peice after reading the answers to deacons questions i understood it better

nice vocad structure and flow and you also gave us a good explanation through those answers

keep it up

peace

i liked your vocab alot and the flow was great

theres a story called the Cold Equation...

just thought id add that in

nice drop

i really like this piece b/c it's real in depth and you can apply it to so many different situations in life...it probably has true deep meaning to you but someone who read it could definitely relate to it....good shit...

thanx for the feedback peepz...much appreciation...
and yea Gonzo...i read that story for english before...kinda sad...
anyway...thanx again peepz
peACE

i almost forgot about this. i wrote this poem for my gf hw assignment.
haha. she got an A. isn't writing grand? haha. uppin
peace

its wut makes the meaning of abstract special....
figure it out urselves...

^That did stand out for me. More so than it would cos of what came before it.

It had an unusual feel to it. One which made me think of the stars. Maybe tis the seeming 'eternity' of them. The 'wonder' of the sky at night (and day).

It aint one i'd like to take apart. What you 'covered' did though relate to what i said above. To me anyway.

A profound piece. In a way, it had the feel of an unrelenting attack of sorts...the way you wrote it i mean. Which suited it i think.

...resp...

^thanx man. this was a difficult piece. but i enjoyed writin it...much
appreciation man......keep it real.......
.............
peACE