Things arent always as they seem
 

Dry my tears push away the fear,
Never more
Drop the pain and leave it there,
On the floor
Rotting from the outside in,
To the core
Know the lies and forever try,
Believe the lore
Close it and throw away the key,
Lock the door
You gave me hope for tomorrow’s dreams,
What was it for?

Crucify my personal Jesus,
Kill the sins
Sleep in my personal hell,
The place within
Look in the eyes of my personal demon,
A evil grin
A placid lake that reflects the cell,
What does it tell?
Screaming to get out, forever free,
Hear my yell
Lost forever in a twisted dimension,
That’s where Ill dwell

A soft ray of sunlight strikes my eyes,
Awakens me
The lies are gone, the truth comes through,
I can see
Its clear, the demons gone,
Away he flees
My liberation, the day has come,
My decree
I blow away the dust, I push away the dirt,
Simply me
I survived my depression, my self-decimation,
Amazingly
So I smile as I stand next to god,
Shamelessly

I ask him a simple question…
Why me?
He blinks his eyes and then replies
“Things aren’t always as they seem.”

sorry wasnt feeling the set up much and it was sort of hard to flow but keep up the work ~ out~

really...i thought the structure made it unique, instead of the same old bars...

its supposed to be read line...pause..finish

Like Crucify my personal Jesus(pause)
Kill the sins
Sleep in my personal hell(pause)
The place within

maybe i should of added cammas in those places

o well

I liked it alot, hopeful, I hafta say. I also did like the pauses you had and commas woulda helped it out alot, but there was somethign missing with the entire thing. I donno. maybe it was the rhyme scheme. Other than that it's dope. i'm no poet, I just review. Keep at it.

k i added the commas

ohky sorry am use to reading battles so thats how i read it but yah i get the peause and read thing now.

ohky now sense i get the set up i liked the pause thing but u seem to be wondering to me and it didnt reall attack the subject but more drefeidt around it