spoken word.........
 

my brainstorming brings nothing but a dark cumulus cloud//
and i can't fuckin think because it rumbles so loud//
oh no here come the raindrops, mentally drenching me//
this storm is so bad it's physically preventing me from becoming anything i'd ever want to be//
when lord will this rain ever let up?//
when i'm on the verge of crazy because i'm so fed up?//
i need a guiding light to lead me to the right path//
even a brief moment of sunshine, so i can be released from this storms wrath//
but i can't get away because the clouds follow so close//
how can i escape this unforgiving but ever present host?//
it swallows my mind, then swallows me whole//
i try to stay dry but it's drenching my soul//
and this thing, this thing destroys me in my entirety//
and i just sit here patiently, hoping someone will inspire me//
but nobody's come and nothing has changed//
and i'm oh so close to becoming deranged//
there's nothing i can do to break this spell, and i'm tired of being stuck in this personal hell//
everything i am is washing away*dispersed into the puddles that i trudge through today//
and i'm looking so hard but there's nothing worth finding//
my eyes can't adjust because this lightning's so blinding//
like the crack of a whip, it's striking all around//
i'm calling out for help but my voice is muffled by the sound//
don't make this mistake..don't let this happen to you//
because trust me, you don't want to end up here too//
this is just a warning to anyone who feels lost//
do everything in your power to find the way..no matter what the cost.................

this is just some shit i wrote a while back..i was in a tough place in my life and this piece personified me exactly back then...just wonderin what ya'll thought...

also you guys should check out Cold Equations...and Soft Focus:Determination..and nightime sorrow...those are three i happened to look at and was damn impressed with that shit...you guys should reply on those as well...

feedback please.............good or bad i just want to see some opinions......................................

uppin for feed back...........lemme know what ya'll think...............

Diverse "Words Manifested"...................................

uppin one last time.............................................. .................................................. ....................................

woow i really liked it

great imagary on the storm and i felt your emotions, flow was nice..only a couple of slow spots

im sorry your gettin slept on i feel the pain

thats the only problem here is how much sleeping goes on its incredibly weak...its not that hard to type up a some quick feedback for someone, cause i know for a fact that pointers help and can really up people skills...

anyone thanks for peeping my stuff and given me a shout out much appreciated...

i think ill write a peice about sleepin

keep it up man

hey man i appreciate the feedback a lot...just tryin to elevate but its hard when you don't really get any advice...i'll be sure to check out the next piece you write....one.

uppin for just a little more feedback..........i like to hear opinions and shit.............................................

aye this piece right here was sweet i really did like it, most of the time i read though people drops and nothing really catchs my eye until i read this drop. but keep writing i be back to read more

hey thanx for the input..................i'll post some more stuff later on................................................ ..................................

damn diverse..that was some deep shit....

"when lord will this rain ever let up?//
when i'm on the verge of crazy because i'm so fed up?//"

I loved that shit...the raw emotion shined throughout....and kept me reading......