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Why her lord?..(She)

She that mystery unsolved in my life
that gurl comes close, to be my wife
she makes me feel, just like it is..
not a show, but strictly bizz..
she that one makes my life worthy ..

Why? i wonder, why feelings never accured
till she walked in to my life, made me feel no longer nerd,
she was that goal i had to have..

Showed me life, from different ways..
teached me how to spend real days..
Made my heart pump hard and straight
at one point i believed in faith..
Till it collapsed, right under me ..
turned from joy to i'm not free..

So now, as i walk down in shadows now..
im feelin down no longer wow..
the complex, that she brought with her..
was nice but drove us apart ..
Made it beautifull at the start , ..maybe good things dont last long, ..
maybe im just the one that wrong, ..
but she..

She couldnt stand when i told lies, ..
when i was hiding in discuise..
bein un-true to her or me ..
when i locked my self in feeling wise, ..to let it be
She showed me things, im thankfull for..
theres not a gurl that i adore, ..
My puzzles were put back a part..
but now its destroyed and confused just like my start..
somethimes i wonder what i live for..
theres not a love in this world that i want more..
feel like a dolphin, stranded on shore..
what to do next dont ask it me..
cuz what u get is what u see!..
but she..

Why her lord..?

made me feel no longer nerd,< Your gangsta, lol

Also.. You should of replied to mine instead of two levidicius.. lol

Your flow was good.. Use inners or multis.. the flows nice but could be way more complex.. The lines had alot of meaning in.. I was feeling that.. Nothing in the 'wow' factor, like wordplay or metas.. but the meaning was carried of ever so well..

Pz.

Thnx m8 = )

And i will repy to urs..

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yeaaaaaaaaaah that was tight mayne, you got a good talent in yo work mayne, in this it aint about rhyming its strictlt about meaning, yeah this was good mayne!

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i agree this had a well thought out concept...i liked it....you got a nice style of wrting......pZ......it gets ya thinking man.........tight

Thnx ..

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iLL piece dawg....Your concept was hot , I really liked it.....Very creative........Your content was iLL , your rhyme scheme was dope and you stayed on topic.......Good flow...Your lines had a deep meaning to it.......Overall this was a dope piece

Thnx man = )


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dis was a nice piece
could of been better if u used multis
but it was still nice
nice flow
nice style of writting
7.5/10

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