Reality Check
 

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8400#post958400
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8562#post958562
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...8847#post958847

havent posted in awhile. kinda rusty
so i wrote a few bars to get back into it

This is what really goes down day to day
been workin nine ta five just tryin to stay awake
got caught being cautious not makin mistakes
not takin a hit just hittin the breaks
shakin off fate to create my own destiny
threatened life ta go chest to chest with me
finally becoming what i was always ment to be
decide ta step up or get laid to rest with ease
cause no emcee will ever get the best of me

Was kinda short.. but i guess it was cool.. you kinda need to improve on your vocab.. it was kinda simple

yeah..short but okay..vocab needs work..keep elevatin.

short...vocab not well executed...used "me" twice not good

drastic need in elevation and shit but not bad just not good

keep elevating dog i think i have read something from you in the past that i liked

opeace

aight thks for the feedback. i made it short for all the ADD people on here that sleep on long drops. and i know the vocab was low but if u take a look at most maintstream rappers they dont really use big vocab either. (although a few do)

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