adam 12
 

the black and white death squads surge fear in my thoughts/
cuz they have ways to kill with a liscense for no cause/
why, cuz they have guns and a bat belt with a magic wand/
one smak with it and you be pissin like you have the runs/
the shit is real so pay attention to this lesson just listen/
got you in suspended animation not knowing da real situation/
about the real problem plaguing this fucked up nation/
were authority is widely misused to fuck wit the minority/
south central type of shit , raids and hit, get ya door kicked/
drop down to da floor, felt like this alot of times and before /
Mcgruff took a bite out of fu's livin hartimes in our own confines/
we get mistreated as da rubber glove digs in were da sun don't
don't shine, nothing new, just drink a brew wit da crew/
next to a parkin lot, hanging high like electrical lines next to some dirty shoes/ Passin bye like a gestapo fuckin wit da jews/
we get scared since we carry narcotics and warrants/
why they fuck with hoodlums not of importance/
there are more big crimes to be solved out there/
but they still fuck with us since they are bored eatin donuts/
fuck it, its a cycle dat we cant shut cuz they are cops/
to protect their shit and serve us with their iron rods/
daam, fucked up life in the gutter gettin harrased by a copper/

nice,nice,but ya didn't leave 3 threads....read the sticky'z...Not bad stuff tho....wasn't that bad

thought this was pretty average with a lot of room for improvement....the scheme was simple....which look away from the read.....try adding some nice multis....and some good word play...some of ya vocab was good but then you had lines that were all basically one silable words....ya structure seemed ok for the most.....so jus expand in future on this style..it will make it a much more interesting drop...aight...pZ

dat womps when ya gotta leave 3 links, i 4got and got my freestyle got deleted.... learn from this.

word, like everyone is warning you (which I find a little amusing), you have to reply to three other open mics, and post links in this thread to your replies, or it gets deleted.
thanks.