first raps
 

all i do is roll with vandals ill have your bitch blowin on my dick like candles
and make her say mmm mmm good like cambells this aint a track its a sample
and all yall niggas who think u brave heart get sent to the grave yard
with your face scar'd for those who play hard
get hurt take it like a man if we doin jooks together lets take it to the fan
if you aint down with the clan u can be left where u stand
im fuckin sick of niggas plottin now they think about shit they got in
i havent forgotten niggas still get shot fam
we can got to war with 4-4's if not drop your sword
ill have bitches hop your broad have you on your knees like im the lord
i aint no god fuck jesus thats why i rap and find bitches who loves penis
got kicked out of high school cuz i cut regents fuck the i plegde to alligence



....................... i still aint finished

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But this was ok....your structure could a bit better though, some lines were short some were long, try to keep them around the same lenght though so it is structured good....flow in this was alright i thought, got off sometimes, add more multies in this to make it better...but overall this was alright...keep at it.

not a bad concept here......flow was on point for most.....thought the structure was ok.....i dont think line length really comes into it.....so long as the stransition is there.....saw a couple of multis..but like masta said more would up the read..but yeah interesting read....stay up.....pZ....