The Best? Then Get away.
 

Its Open Trickery That Sparks No Questionings
Seems To me With Gun Powder? No Label Openings
Even though Im Using Pistol Perscision Its Tragic
Life Rejects it Cuz He Usin a Gun On Automatic

Take a glance at my life cuz ive Stared My eye Balls Off
Its Amazin How Sight is Rejected If u dont Got it All
Some Say That Im Another Daily Out Break
But Daily Critics Say "Not a Rb Legend Okay?"
Minus the Fuckin Pleasentrys the Truth
If The evidence dont Fit u aint Got Proof
A Constant Hate or Love in peoples Response
Corespondonce In Open Mic Constont
Almost To A point where Seein My name
In this thread is played like me and the Rain
Cuz Lately Thats my Only Treat As I Fetch My Mind
Everyday Writeing but I Everyday I Get No Shine
Just Tainted Lime Light reflectin off the "Signed"

Its Open Trickery That Sparks No Questionings
Seems To me With Gun Powder? No Label Openings
Even though Im Using Pistol Perscision Its Tragic
Life Rejects it Cuz He Usin a Gun On Automatic

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=96987
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=96720
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7820#post967820

and the title of the thread is title of the peice.

uppin..

u came at this topic a lil differently

its cool and as always good vocab

i have seen a lot better from u but its not a battle

keep it up man.

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Yea this first verse depending on the feedback
i get mabey a second verse will come
that aint such a half ass attetempt
thanx for feedback.

This was okay.. I didn't see nothing that stood out at me.. It had a repetitive flow.. Theres wasn't no multis Nor no inners.. So the flow was pretty useless.. No hate.. The meaning behind the concept was the main thing that kept this good.. I saw attempts at metapjors but they didn't get pulled of too well..

In this thread is played like me and the Rain

:(.. Stay Up.. Pz

lol cool imma just have to spit something that isnt
off the head
:\ imma bust a 2nd verses for u guyz.

its like you're making a poem
not a rap

yeah you went to indept in your mind and not enough offence attacking the listeener but this was far from wack just needs a lil re read and fixing