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BabyGurl68 12-07-03 11:23 PM

"k" (2 years)
 
Damn, i feel likea newbie all over again here .. if any of you remember me from before rb went down lemme kno ... if not ... this is not my best work just shit i needed off my chest .... ill be postin up here cuz my other site is down ... reply n wecome/rewelcome me tell me what you think


------------------- K--------------------------------------
2 years ..
its been two years-cried my share of tears ...
but i have overcome the fear..
tried to drown out my sorrow..
poppin pills with high hopes of tomorrow
borrow dreams eatin beans
but soberness screams ..
they all claimed this would teach us the extremes
but i go to those extremes seein you in my dreams
make me wish i was right there with you
i know you didnt do it on purpose ...
but now im caught in the tried and true. .
but im finding im subdue ..
my lifes takin me nowhere
im in despiar my cheeks are bare and im caught in the wear and tear ..
...........
this cold bitter air .. freezing from the inside out has left me entirely cold..
the only ounce of warmess rests within my tears that freeze as they brim my eyelids and stick to my cheeks ..
timing is everything
and the time is now.. tonight
i have $96.63 to my name and i will give it all up for the right medicine to end my sorrows
.............
tomorrow morning headlines will read my name..
and there will be no shame or blame,
they will all admit my other attempts were lame,
they will know that my internal flame can never be reignited leaving me in a broken cold frame
the death of a life without aim, lost in the drug game,
december 5th young girl od'ed this 1'6 year old girl was proceeded in death by her bestfriend Jeffrey Pardon .. whom died 2 years ago on memorial day, today would of been his 17th birthday.... an altopsey concluded she has been using kedimine ... the drug teens call special k or k has killed 9 teens in the county in the past 2 years ... including Jeff

TRIBAL 12-07-03 11:44 PM

wow...i'm sorry for your loss..

this was the deepst most emontional poem i'v read on this site...wow...uuummmm nice peice... this hard....you had a nice discription or your feelings...

keep this up

peace

(sorry i didn't write alote its jus well you no)

-->FreeBasE<-- 12-08-03 02:43 PM

im sorry to hear that, deepest condolences

the poem was good though. good imagery and description

good vocab and structure.

keep postin gurl.........................................

*Bling* 12-08-03 05:58 PM

wow deep man i cant rate but very deep and sorry for the loss

~PEACE~

varentao 12-08-03 08:05 PM

Theres a lot of things that could be said about this piece. It's very personal and let's rip bare emotions. So i'll just say i appreciate what it's about. And the piece as a whole.

...resp...

(Oh, and welcome back...)..

Kclipz 4 Murkin 12-09-03 06:28 PM

heh i remember you postin a bit before i registered ere iwas a guest


But ma this peice was very good
straight forward with emotions and everythin a very emotional peice i respect you ma
(deep respects for your loss and fams)

BabyGurl68 12-10-03 07:26 PM

thanks for the replies ... im gonna try to get up on rb more now ... im usually not to active but then again i mianly come when i need shit off my chest but im gonna try! haha thanks ...


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