21 Rule (1-0) vs 22 phillie Blunt (1-0)
 

topic: It Wasnt An Accident

Due date: dec 12th
Vote ends: dec 15th

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It Wasn't An Accident Mom

Anger and hate live through my cold runnin vains
Love it slowly fades away the envy always stains
Pushed me from here lowered my self-esteem
Punished me for being blessed or so it seems
Three years ago I was one poor amazing athlete
one of the best..
Didn't think possible cause I grew from concrete
First year of rep soccer I made the provincials
Yet you held me back from all my principles
Destroyed my hopes dreams and main priorities
Sterotyped my life path cuz of the poor majority
So now i'm focused on one particular dream
Accomplish ya wish make ya emotions scream
I'm..
Creatin a future letter for you in a mortal crime
Prepare a drastic action prevail it at a certian time
Leave you gutted emotionly take away your love
Ridacule your beliefs spit on the angels above
Take your bible and burn it in the fire of hate
Make you feel ridiculous for your seen mistakes
Never once did I judge your morols on ghost
Sat back and listened to every word you spoke
Turns out me bein me wasn't in your eyes natural
Me going professional wasn't living nor spiratual
So you smashed my dreams like a fallen glass
Didn't try to catch me you let me helplessly smash
You was my mother My map suppose to guide
Help me stay strong but that you didn't provide
You incouraged failure the roads weren't marked
Our journy as mother and son can't be sparked
All because of this deminishing of my dream
you killed...
My ego and love by trying to raise surpreme
This letter proves my mystic hate of lies
Your a christian so am I I pray your demies
For your actions of holding me back strong
This letter is to prove what you did was wrong
When you read this you'll realise I still hold a grudge
And because of your inpulse then you have no love
For you finding this letter is my faithful punishment
You killed my soul tied my talent down in harrisment
Emotions of hate are from a lost acomplishment
What you did in the past wasn't at all an accident

in, n' deacon im officially 3-0
maven
btk
fgee

sorry for bein late..

Birth

My mom 16, father 20.. wheres the hope?,
Especially that night when the condom broke,
Nights of bickering, hate portrayed,
Father left for mistakes he made,
Dad dismissed, when the news hit him,
Knew he had a child, but wanted nothing
to do with him..
A life distraught, parents un-passionate,
as My mom would yell..
......................you were only an accident,

Crashing The Car

I grew up, mother was somewhat nicer,
until i smashed up the front end of the chrysler,
she screamed at me, heart its in vault,
and even the insurance knew.. it wasnt my fault,
it was an accident, i would plead for her to hear,
complaints about my birth, her eyes that tear'd,
always went back to that.. whats the use,
for every problem, im her general excuse,

The Wedding

I met a gurl, though life was hard,
believe it or not, it was the gurl in the other car,
insurance covered, legal issues apart,
she talked to me, n' grasped my heart,
mother furious, still enraged for the instance,
and wanted nothing to do with me-
-when i brought her home for Christmas,
torn i walked.. the isle of love never cared,
as i looked down the chapel.. she wasnt there,

The Night

Soon after, i started to get enraged,
from feelings had, have feelings left insane,
My mom went back to me, a son that doesnt,
she bickered, until the knife tip hit her stomach,
i could deal, with what was delt,
for the life i had, and love un-felt,
killing her was the only thing that i felt passionate,
as on trial i sat.. "It wasn't an accident"

good piece....that was well writtin....good luck...lets get some votes

I liked the way rule wrote, ..calda, ..was to nice in my opinon , ., ..but i feld the style rule wrote his piece, some nice lines, ..good vocab..flowed good..both were enjoyable to read..but rule's verse was better in this battle = )

Vote = Rule

Hmm.. (dont count my vote.. but im just trying to get
people to vote on this.. but ima break it down ne ways)

Rule..
Never really seen ya shit before.. and you came dope here
the concept was good... YET, you really got caught up in
the story to the point where it seemed like you didn't know
what you were talking about. Your structure was on point and
Some points were basic.. and the finisher didnt rhyme well at
all, but thats fine, because you did a decent job with this.

Calda..
For bein rushed, it kept me hooked. It was a bit basic, but to
the point which is what i like to see. The concept was ehh.. but
you handled it nicely. Glad you ended it with it not being an
accident.. that was a good change up.. your story telling is on
point.. but you lacked originality.. creativity was there.. n' flow
was on point.. another decent job here

Though a VERY close bout here, and i wouldn't mind seein
a rematch sumtime.. i do THINK (key word think) that calda
took this by only a bit.

unofficial vote - calda
(not swaying.. just trying to upp for people to vote n' expressin
my views on this piece..

still 1-0 Rule

deacon.. did u sign out?

i've seriously gotta say this here was the hottest of the week...
i was really suprised...Rule stepped up the best he's ever done...
n Calda was good like usual...but also a little better than usual...
well damn...

both of the flows were on point
topics were hit well...good stories n all
emotion was deep on Calda's...so was Rule's
imagry...close there too...i really don't want to vote...
it's too hard...lol...but since i'm in Rule's crew...
in a battle this close... i won't vote...
save any bitching or whatever ya know..
props

Calda came like he usually does (great), but i think
rule put in that little extra effort trying to top you
Both lovely piece's..but rules imagery got it for me
Props both...

V. Rule

rule wins.
you voters are indecisive assholes.
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