Corrupted Visions: Slower Days
 

Hook:
slower days, slowing the physics in my brain/
slowing down the time length between each day/
slower days, can’t keep living on life in this way/
the pain to great, god please, When will she wake?/

Verse #1:
sleep, and dreams, 2 things that keep me from experiencing reality/
all the calamity that we can’t seem to steer away, draining life/
with every passing day, the feeling so strange, and I’m afraid/
of losing what’s so close to me, deemed to believe she can go on/
living life beyond these 4 walls, but unfortunately I’m wrong/
but what happened? when did this all start? I try to remember but it’s so hard/
but theirs a flash of light, a forgotten memory coming to life/
but it’s one that I can’t fight, not without u by my side/
I remember all the fun times, that we used to have/
we used to laugh, kiss, cuddle, and those times in bed I thought would always last/
and all this came to a crash, and I wait as I hold onto your soft hands/
for an answer, to the question that I asked/

Hook:
slower days, slowing the physics in my brain/
slowing down the time length between each day/
slower days, can’t keep living on life in this way/
the pain to great, god please, when will she wake?/

Verse #2:
I still remember the first day we met, it was at the the café in the mall/
and I still remember the way u dressed, heh that’s something I could never forget/
as I sat there and watched, as u lifted your cup to take a sip/
so soft were your lips, and I still cherish our first kiss/
and those first moments of our first date, the greatest day/
something I’ll never be able to erase away, and it’s strange/
about how good memories can be so filled with grief and pain/
But now my interpretation, and comprehension is in decay/
my brain stuck in a fray, I can’t take living this way/
but there’s only one reason why I stay, and it’s for u babe/
as I sit and await for a break, but u lie in death’s wake/
I try to osculate, but your spirit is so far away/
and I miss u, with every passing day/

Hook:
slower days, slowing the physics in my brain/
slowing down the time length between each day/
slower days, can’t keep living on life in this way/
the pain to great, god please, when will she wake?/

Verse #3:
a casting stone that could tumble but never fall/
was the way I felt within your arms/
the first night, that we went the whole 9 yards/
and after it was done, 1 month later, u carried my son/
it was the excitement, that put joy into all the fun/
until that gruesome day, u were brought down with the gun/
now I sit beside u, and watch, cuz for 6 months/
coma has stopped all signs of talk/
and it’s my fault, that my past life caught back up/
it could’ve been helped, if I were the one to take the shot/
but day after day, I find myself back in the same place/
mind being chased, so I can’t pace the way I brace/
to think, of the years past that I laid at waste/
but maybe I just wait for u to wake, to gain/
forgiveness and the answer to a question asked before that dreadful day/

Hook:
slower days, slowing the physics in my brain/
slowing down the time length between each day/
slower days, can’t keep living on life in this way/
the pain to great, god please, When will she wake?/

Verse #4:
1 month later and I’m still waiting here, every day I’m shedding one extra tear/
been spending most my nights alone, drowning my sorrows in hard liquor and beer/
till one day u finally moved, opened your eyes and we connected, 2 with 2/
in that hospital room, and I remember telling u I love u, and u said I love you to/
and u remembered the question that I asked u, and u said yes, I do want to marry you/
and we both smiled, exchanged a stare, thought it was gonna last, but u died right there/
labor came a month early, wheeled u to emerge, now I’m left, with nothing but pictures/
and memories, because the child, never made it to see his day of birth/
with nothing left to live for, I sat at home alone behind locked doors/
remembering all these thoughts, only makes the pain burn more/
I can’t live no more, fuck it, I’m ready to walk that last path of life/
by taking it, suicide on my mind, gripping the handle of that 9/
and to my son and wife, hold on, I’m coming to join the fly/

keep fuckin forgettin this but here's my replies.

west
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Masta C

and for u ppl peepin this piece I know it's damn well long but if u can plz read it and leave me some feedback on this spent quite a bit of time with this piece. thanx in advance peace.

Damn this was a long piece here lol, you gotta make your drops short man lol, just messing....but this was a pretty good read, long but it was worth it i hought...your flow was good in this, like most of your stuff is....vocab always good from you....structure needs a bit of a touch up, lines were kinda stretched but nothing you cant fix...overall good drop...keep at it.

great vocab, great story, great peice in general, long but a very good read, some lines kinda confusin and miss matched but that was ok, very good topic, good wordplay

whoa that was Long As Hell But i enjoyed the read.............ya structure was off is some bits of it you seemed to stretch ya Lines But It went well in the end.......Good Flow Went well Through the whole thing......It Was A Promising Topic and Ya Used it well.... Vocab was good....Ya use The Chorus well....Ya Chorus Was good nothing wrong with it.......allround 8/10 for it Kuz Peace Dawg.

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long read really bored me:(....nice vocab...structure was completly fucked up all the verses should have the same structure or atleast similar...topic was ok...wordplay not bad not bad at all...
overal decent drop

Damn Gene. . Length Was Cool With Me. . But The Structure Made The Flow Come Off A Bit. Content Was Great Though, So The Read Was Cool. Chorus Was Good. . Really No Error Anywhere In The Entire Piece. Next Time, Even Your Lines A Bit For The Better Flow. . The Stretched Lines Usually Don't Flow Good By Reading It. I'm Sure It Could Flow To A Beat Tho. Keep Droppin Man.

-Formula.