Another Freestyle 1
 

My enscrutiating ability to see through people
Is enough to turn o'er most folks to evil
More than once I've been called a next-gen Knieval
And more than once ive denied claims of being suicidal
I'm not very vial and im not in denial
it just seems they wanna ship me to an isle
'nd never see me again or say another word
I've never really questioned it but i'm insured
that they love me like i was cow manure
i'm a mouse being led to this trap
All i have to save me is this rap
but on every freestyle i post and every site i join
theres always gonna be someone saying its shit and im toy'n
yet winning support of my ryhmes through text battles ain't my dream
i just hope when im chasing it down i got support on my team
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i was tryin to go to bed when i thought of this took about 30 minutes tell me what you think
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97422
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=96565
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97403

Nice spit ..good flow & content..

This Was Alright I Thought....structure needs some work in this one though...you had some short lines and long lines, try keeping them around the same length, so it doesnt throw the flow off....Flow in this was alright...your vocab was alright could be up'd though...overall this was alright...keep at it.

yeah i thought this was average, a bit short and the flow lost me in places, specially with the way it was structured....some of the shit you were rhyming was jus stupid

'I've never really questioned it but i'm insured
that they love me like i was cow manure'

not good^^...but with work it can be sorted jus stick to decent topics and even ya stuff out.....pZ

I think dis wasnt dat good,coulda been better try harder next time!!.....keep it up!!

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