New Light
 

Yo, I'm new to the game
'Magnificent T' is my name
I ain't no hater & Iain't no lover
So I'ma keep doin' my thang,
If u hatin' on me you hatin' a King.
I'm neutral like water but can react like acid ,
I'm fantastic, calm down pleaze before i
become all drastic

I spit Lyrics like i spit on the pave
the only time u see me is
when i contemplate in a cave.
If I loose focus i'll be sleepin' in a grave,
if u become a hater on me
i'll be forced to make u my slave.
When i'm flared up i spit out flames,
right now i'm candle lit tryin' to bring
New Light to the game.

:guy:

reply to three other open mics and post links to your replies or this gets deleted.
thanks

this was way too simple, kids play......lengthen ya bars to start with...that'll help next get a decent scheme going,...and get some multis thrown in....you dont need to go over board on complexity, but some is good..lol......pZ....elevate

new but it was aight heard betta

yo, Deva thanx for the advice!

Yo Maven is dis what u asked 4?

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...4554#post974554

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...15&pagenumber=2

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...4591#post974591

yo wut up homie

im new to so i really got nuttin to say but it was a basic flow, jus elevate sum more n youll b another hot mc

return de favor
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97593

...I didn't like it...I thought is was too short and your rhyme was too simple...but...hey what do I know...???...keep up^^

Thanx Ron D uppin'

soz lastpoet if u didn't like it but as i said "i'm new 2 the game"

This was ok....but it was too simple...make your lines a bit longer and keep them around the same length so its structured good and so it helps your flow out....also try adding some multies and internals to this to make it better...also try to up your vocab...keep elevating and keep at it.