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Jo-JO 12-10-03 12:31 PM

Wisdom
 
Deva/Pollution and Evolution
Masta C/Life (Feat: MC uski)
MP Pasiz/Rise of the underground-feat. Rule

Everybody's born stupid, some people liv stupid, and a few die stupid
Please take a quick bid, I know and I did, you'll die like a niave kid
Born out of relationship wicked, live wit anger livid, intelligence timid
Afraid 2 show its hed, ur brain is litl fed, wit book and experience bread
Starvd almost ded, ur intuition made u quikly misled, so lstn 2 me instead
My words come out the good book, quick look, the sources can't b shook

CHORUS:
2 discover the scheme of thing, one thing 2 another continously adding
While still in depth searching, but the answer I remained not finding
"Look," says the Teacher discovered, this is the truth I have uncovered
God made man wit uprite dream,man went n serch of unrightous scheme

It is better to listen to the longwind of a wise man's, true reprimand
Then 2 spend ur time 2 listn 2 a foolish man's, shortlived song at hand
At this point I am determined to be wise, but this is very much beyond me
Its faroff and the goal oversize, who can discover whatever wisdom may b
I turned my mind 2 undrstand, 2 investigate and search the ways of the land
N the pointless life of this woman, Iv seen both of des happenins will n can
Rightous men perishing n rigtousness, n wicked men livin long in wickedness

CHORUS:
2 discover the scheme of thing, one thing 2 another continously adding
While still in depth searching, but the answer I remained not finding
"Look," says the Teacher discovered, this is the truth I have uncovered
God made man wit uprite dream,man went n serch of unrightous scheme

People die with drugs inside, n altered mind, after a hard, long life ride
C thru intelligenc faced, thot u was wiz til ur hart died, impossibl 4 u 2 fly u lied
U liv lif lik ur better, wit overdose vomit on ur sweater, ur mother's cheek is wetter
The promises u sed 2 er, u fuckd up n cant make it betr, wit a hastily writn letr
ur lif is dun, broke the heart of ur daughter n son, guess it was ezr 2 run
Was it worth the eight ball fun, ur problems weigh a ton, in death u still aint 1
Time 2 add ur name 2 list of those who died sadly, u livd much 2 badly
John Belushi, Chris Farley, Kurt Cobain, Now ur name ill stain n 4 evr remain

CHORUS:
2 discover the scheme of thing, one thing 2 another continously adding
While still in depth searching, but the answer I remained not finding
"Look," says the Teacher discovered, this is the truth I have uncovered
God made man wit uprite dream,man went n serch of unrightous scheme

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I mean no disrespect to my family for writing this pz people need to learn however that drugs do nothing but pull families, lives, and dreams apart. I pray that this song is a wake up call to someone. I would really like your critques but more importantly if you know anyone who died do to drug related stupidity post their names. It's to late for them but anyone who reads this it may help.

Jo-JO 12-10-03 12:33 PM

RIP ROLAND W RITTER I
HE DIED DEC 5 O3 FROM A DRUG INDUCED HEART ATTACK. HE IS SURVIVED BY HIS DAUGHTER AND SON ROLAND AND JESS. HE WUZ AN AVID OUTDOORSMAN N PLAYED A MEAN GUITAR.
PZ AND MUCH LOVE FOREVER.

Dev 12-10-03 12:52 PM

i see you put meaning into this piece, which is always good to see....quite emotional i thought.....but it could have been executed alot better, with a better structure, n better imagery... ya flow was a bit repetative......but yeah, you got the point across so.....pZ......

~THA SAINT~ 12-10-03 01:21 PM

yea i feel the same here i was feeling the message but i didnt like the flow or imagery it could have been done alot better just keep elevating

SPEC-tacular 12-10-03 02:30 PM

flow was ok vocab ight wordplay ight multi's ight punchlines ok structure was weak over all 6/10

I.C.U. unit 12-10-03 02:31 PM

that was fucking good
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Menik 12-10-03 03:36 PM

Yeah this was a pretty good piece here.....liked the read...structure was pretty good in this i thought...flow was alright in this, stayed on pretty much through out it....vocab was good, keep that up....probably could have used some more multies in this though...but overall this was a pretty good piece...keep at it.

Jo-JO 12-10-03 03:36 PM

Thanx everyone, yo for real tho if ya'll have a shout out about any sad deaths please put some names down. I tried really hard on the structure and it still didn't work if any of ya'll have any ideas please let me know cuz it's not coming along the way I would like pz and luv


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