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Self Inflicted (feat Speek.E.Z.)
Speek.E.Z
My Urges For Her Always Left Me Feeling Restricted… Until One Day, Our Decision Left Us Self Inflicted… I Was With Her, And I Was Caught In The Moment… Felt A Turn In My Stomach, Swear It Was An Omen… But We Still Got Hot And Heavy Under The Covers... Exploring Each Other, We Were 2 Teenage Lovers... Experiment Our Love, And See What Sex Felt Like... Couldn't Explain How, When I Was In Her It Felt Right... Not Caring For The Consequences Of The Moment... Just As We Reached The Peak, On The Lights Went... Turned Around To See Her Mom And Dad At The Door... Panicked And Ran Out Screaming Your Daughters A Whore… The Realist A joining of two souls, the holiest union Why are the days before full of confusion No illusion, comrades second my actions Father liked tradition, now it was sanctioned Went ring shopping with her best friend The jeweler felt he had a price to defend Proposed at the location of our first kiss We then reminisced on our ongoing tryst Minds dedicated to the utmost devotion Both hearts soared from the love explosion The abundance of joy, lasting for days With her in my eyes my grin never fades She said those two words, emotions lifted This death of a bachelor was self inflicted http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97437 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97441 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=95002 |
that last par had me rollin haha that was nice for a short piece like that man gave me a real good image while reading this nice piece man
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97770 hit that up for me will ya |
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This collabo was definatly hot. It was a little short but it got the message across with a nice flow and structure. A good concept and title, good read, look forward to seeing more like this..
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nice shit niaa
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This was a pretty good collab here i thought...both of you had good structure in this....both of your flow was good here, stayed on point through out this as i read through it...good vocab from both as well...overall a pretty good piece here....keep at it.
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nice collab
both kept on point..not strecthed structure was dope...flow was good..good vocab and creativity it was good cause it gave a picture in my head nice collab keep it up....yo speek n TR we should do a threesome collab |
this was a good Collab...Ya Had Good Flow It Was Hard Hitting All THe Way Through...your Structure was Nice Ya Keeped it A Good Length.....The Vocab was Great And The Wordplay was Good..All And All A Good Piece....k33p It Commin
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Yo I don't always go for that kind of thing but I'm down for a love joint now, (well it's loveish?!). Plain style worked well. SOme rhymes were strained abit abit but the flow kept it.
My RAting:8/10 Peace |
up we go
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please...red hurts my eyes:(
yeah this was a good open mic...blah realist owns open mics whats new? do something new... great verses both flowed nice different styles obviously but they did not conflict so it was cool vocab precise blah blah blah *becomes a n00b for a moment* 8/10!!!!:):):):):) *goes back to himself* im out |
wow i really liked this collab guys thought it held deep depth and emotion....And this kind of things happen to alot of people...real nice read guys and im lookin forward to doi diss part 2...both of you are in it
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This was good... A little simple with the rhyme scheme, but it wasnt made to be anything complicated. You didnt over-use the vocab, thats hard to do with small verses. I was feeling it pretty good... 7.5-8.0 / 10
No Hate, just how I feel about it... OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion |
that was hot!!!
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up up and away
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