Nuclear Concept: The Rebelion, Pt-1
 

RESPONDED TO:

WORD~P.
RULE
WORD~P.


(ALL THE PEOPLE I MENTION IN THIS ARE PEOPLE I KNOW IN REAL
LIFE. FANCY C, A.K.A. TRUTH, IS ONE OF THE BEST RAPPERS I KNOW)

*wind blowing in background*
*tug boat sounds off*
*Spike steps off boat*
*drops backpack*

2099 - I've been trainin for 20 years/
Cryogenic teaching of skills and the loss of all my fears/
I was one of the chosen - but Fancy knew me before I blew/
So before I could take him out - he had my career subdued/4
2060 - Come home to find my life taken away/
My collection of cars towed - the ransom of my familay/
A message tellin me - if I leave they'll be safe/
Oh - and my family - they charged with conspiracy wit no release date/8
I left the planet - got froze in hyperspace while learnin/
I'd come back in 50 years - fire in my eyes still burnin/
But I got sidetracked - downloadin ABASI's keys to C/
So I came back - goin take back my life prematurely/12
Earth was different - pink skies - water the color of shit/
Clean water was a comodity - you got 50 dollars for ya spit/
Trees were gone - in the place was garbage and statues of C/
Mutated animals were twenty feet tall - and humans hung on "T"s/16
Felt post-apocolyptic - rap had been reduced to talking cryptic/
I had been downloadin hip-hop sites - to keep up with who's ripped it/
And it was like mp3 websites C had them snooped out and shut down/
I read on CNN.com no challengers lasted one round/20
But I'm here now - genetic tamperin given me a third lung/
Brain got four lobes - mouth a little bigger to fit two tongues/
Nerve structure reworked - so I can react a little fasta/
Freestylin had become my blood - ink replaced my plasma/24
Lookin too extract my revenge - I'm gonna rebuild The Coalition/
See if any of the old emcees are still down for this mission/
If not - - - I'll run at FancyC solo/
He can't stop me - I'll be at underground shows with my promo/28
Fortunatly I'm not alone - Ronin was another being in the rap odessy/
He'd been advanced by technology - while I was upgraded through biology/
It was his escape - that was the decidin factor to act now/
I gave him the meeting directions knowin he wouldn't back down/32
So we underground - listen to underground - at the "UnderGround"/
See Kaze reppin as usual - when he's done I'll ask him if he's down/
Turn my back and to see Remix part the crowd like the Red Sea/
Looks like we just found two more to help us bring down C/32

this was ill almost made me cry i was like "thats my spawn"!
lol your words usage here was imaculaent

good shit i think the whole shit was tight good structure and flow vocab and wordplay was good over all 7.7/10

YO THX FOR THE PROPS GUYS.
KEEP THE FEEDBACK COMMIN.
PEACE

This was a pretty good piece here i thought....made a good read...structure in this was alright, could be touched up a bit though...flow was alright in here, stayed on point through out it...vocab was good in this, keep that up...overall a alright piece...keep at it.

yeah... mad props on this peice... ya structure was off, but
ya flow was pretty good... vocab was fuckin outstanding...
and you worded everything real nice like... props again...

~AshY~

ill as fuck, vocab flow was fucking sick
holla S.S

YO QUIT FUCKIN ON THIS MUTHAFUCKAS.
PT-2 WILL BE OUT SOON HOPE YOU DONT SLEEP ON IT TO.

UPPIN^^^^