the english language isn't perfect
 

the english language isn't perfect
since humanities surfaced the wrong vowels
when our feels should go from yards to miles
I know for certain
that this can't be close to the master persons
god in I believe
but can't write the right verses
yes the style splits
disperses, slit, slice and dices
diverses between in whatever case
or sensitive vocab I reherse and
I'm still puttin words in places not normally put 2 work at
this english language is cursed
we're under gods speech circus
time rip and our minds slips accidentally speaking theories of life
on a genious surface
on an invisible grip
might as well have a speech impediment
because what I said in heaven is worthless
unspoken scripts of power exist
its just english is complex at best 2 work wit
who knows the rest
but lest I say it?
MindKontrol

MMK for a second I was confused because I thought literally it was about the title... which I might add made me chose it from all these on the front page, I looked all of them over for a minute. I found it ironic that you were speaking about the English language and then chose to use slang words but I guess in all that's part of expressing what the English language is unable to do at all times... I smell ya... kinda like a "words can't express..." insert whatever feeling it is that's there and overwhelming at the moment... I dunno I like it. It was creative and different... saw it as many things, one a comming out peice as well. Pretty good, I can't really pick anything on it that was bad... on the other side there are things that did catch my attention and make me say wow!

"time rip and our minds slips accidentally speaking theories of life
on a genious surface
on an invisible grip
might as well have a speech impediment
because what I said in heaven is worthless"

Those lines right there stood out to me and I liked them... nice peice...

This wasnt a bad peice here...
you kept a good poetic scheme on this,
and like calisto said, it was Ironic the way you
worded some things... but it all added in to
make this peice really good...
~AshY~

I wrote this along with "the thoughts of a pure human" It took me 40 minutes wrote em' around 5 am today. I tried my best to cloak this in a code. With this rap I wanted to give every one different impressions of it and maybe a second impression if they read it a second time. It has alot of meaning in it. Mostly I was just getting accross that there is a master tounge and that I'm having a hard time tapping into it and blending with it. no matter what I write down or say out loud with no avail I can't succeed from further mental trials. Its part of a teaching of mine that gods intellegence is the main branch and whatever is created by him is a branch of his intellegence. Thats how I look at it in that complexity. Maybe with this angle I have given, my poem will uncover itself 2 u.